Okay! This is for you Imi. Imi said: As for the Telepathy thing...you got me thinking..Was telepathy a power amongst the Team ? I know Ive used it in some IF's , and have read fics with the team communicating with Telepathy..but did that really occur within the show? I do not think Telepathy was a power ever mentioned in BOTP. I just got a sense that Mark had a heightened power of perception. "He seemed to KNOW what was going to happen before the others did" I can not really put my finger on a specific episode/episodes that shows this. It is just a feeling I have from way back when I was really young. This lead into the ESP extension. If you want, I can give you more on my universe and how I fit ESP in. I have been typing and editing and re-editing and so on. Now I wonder if it is even appropriate (or wanted) "My unwillingness to show my stories spings up again." *Cloud trembles in fear.*

OMGosh Cloud...please put your stories up here! This is a very supportive crowd and we love nothing more than to get our hands on a fic. PLeassssssssssseeeeeeeee??? *begs* As far telepaty goes, I agree with you Cloud. I think that the team in general has a heightened sense of not only their 5 senses....but also has a 6th sense of impending danger as well (the one that animals have where they seem to know that a volcano is going to erupt or an earthquake is about to happen.

Springie cheers..."Go, CLOUD!" We want to read your ficcie...and I promise...we'll be nice!!! Funny you should mention telepathy...I agree...but I wrote a fic called "Mind Reading 101"...that had them speaking to each other mentally once they had an update in their implants... and Transmute Jun wrote a great one called "While You Were Sleeping" dealing with a similar idea...

I have seen "While you were Sleeping" but where do I find "Mind reading 101"? Better yet, post it here when the fic section has been opened. Or.... , tell me where to find it and then post it. Like Imi, I hate waiting.

I have also thought that things were known without being said. I hadn't done anything with mine as far as using it, but it's kinda implied I think in the cartoon. Cloud , please post your fics at some point, I sure would like to read them...

Mind Reading 101 is on the new Gatch Archive site...and also on FF.net but I will post it here, too...*grin*

oh be still my beating heart!! I dare not breathe or move... Cloud you absolute Legend you!! Firstly for posting the question on Telepathy, for the fics mentioned..but the biggest gift and surprise is the fact that you are ready to post up your fic!! YOu go girl!! I could just Hug you!!! :hugs: ok..ok..not moving , not breathing, oooh!!!!!!!grin grin grin!

Okay Imi your heart can start beating again. It sounds like some of you would like to hear more about my universe. This is not the story you are asking for, but ?? you could call it an introduction to my world. Remember, I have been developing this world for 20+ years and it has taken on a life of its own. This is very long and detailed so be prepared for a long read. I started off this thread by talking about ESP and telepathy so I will continue in that direction. In my world I linked the ESP powers to the Rigan gene. Somehow I decided there were 12 powers on Riga: telepathy, precognition, clairvoyance, astral projection, dream reading or interpreting, telekinesis/transportation, an oracle, weather changing, healing, and medium/channeling. I cannot remember the other two but I think I might have also had a witch and a sorcerer. (Hey I was young and thought witches and wizards were interesting. Don?t ask what some of these have to do with ESP.) On Riga Telepathy is a natural ability. Children have it from an early age. (I explained the team not having powers until later, because they were not around people who used telepathy.) The next step on with powers is: minimal Precognition, Clairvoyance, Dream Reading and basic Healing. It requires a little focus and training for these senses/powers to be heightened beyond ?normal.? With work most Rigan?s can learn how to use these. (The more the ability is used the better you become at it.) When one specializes, or is a Prime, in these areas you are accurate 100% of the time. Beyond that you are getting into much more specialized training, with a Master/Mentor or even a Prime. Next comes Astral Projection and Telekinesis of small/light weight objects. These abilities require more power or energy so they are harder to learn and use. The next Powers are: Telekinesis of larger objects/people and Transportation of self. As you can see powers are built upon. (At least in my mind they are.) With Telepathy if you can see, or think of, a person you can speak to them telepathically. Family members can speak to each other at much further distances because of the ?link? families have. With training a telepath can strengthen their ability to reach others from greater distances. Strong telepaths can reach across/around a planet. A very strong telepath, or the Prime, can link/connect/speak from one planet to another. Another skill I have linked to telepathy is ventriloquism, the ability to make your voice come from another part of the room or building. A good telepath/ventriloquist can make someone believe they are hearing sounds that are not there, the idea of putting voices/sounds in the head. Each power has a Prime or a person who knows all about the power (the top dog). When tested Primes are the strongest in their field. There can only be one Prime for each power and a Prime specializes in only one power, although they can have other minor powers. For example my Healer also has telepathy and some clairvoyance. As Powers grow, a person?s sensitivity to other people increases, (we all give off an energy signature/aura and on Earth we are very noisy thinkers.) Higher Powers become overloaded with all the noise (emotions and thoughts), so they must learn to create shield/ barriers around themselves. Primes and their Seconds, TWICs, live in an area in the mountains where they are shielded from outside noises and their rooms/ living quarters are shielded from each other. My muses are having/forcing me to create a 13th Power. The team is gaining the use of this power. (I am not saying this right.) The team is slowly learning the ability to speak to animals. When they reach their full ability they will be able to take on, or change into, a different animal form. (At this time I am waiting to see if the form will be their namesake, or something else.) I am slowly learning that Mark has had this ability to hear animals since birth, but he has closed off or shut out the ?voices? most of his life. (It is that control thing he has.) I know there are always opposites in life, good/bad, right/wrong, etc. This is also true with the Powers on Riga; there are White Powers and Dark Powers. Both Powers get the same results, the difference comes from where the energy comes from. When using White Powers you strive for balance and control. The energy you need comes from around you, from nature. But what you take from nature you must give back in some form. Following the White path is considered the hard path. The energy for Dark Powers comes from inside you. It comes from strong emotions, usually anger and frustration. Following this path is much easier and learning comes much faster, but because the powers come from within, you can only be as strong as your emotion(s). When your anger is exhausted so are your Powers and probably you as well. I mention this because there is infighting between the Powers. Followers of the White Path believe their path is the only way. If you use Dark Powers you are tarnished and cannot become a White follower. Then the Primes want to wash their hands of you and stop your training. One last thought on my ESP Powers on Riga. The Rigan word for Prime when translated into English means God. (Yes, I have even created a limited Rigan language.)

Still not working. Will it work on this smaller post?

Some other facts about my Universe: This may have been mentioned in the show, but in my universe Earth and Rigan are sister Planets. Riga has been battling Spectra for many years over 100. Military personnel and dignitaries have sent family members to other planets, Earth being one of them, to protect them from an escalating war. (This is what brought Earth to Spectra?s attention.) Now that Earth has become a new home to many Rigans, Riga Defense has decided they must protect Earth too. Riga is a more technologically advanced planet and they occasionally share technical information with Earth. Enough to help Earth defend herself but, just like in Star Trek, many on Riga are afraid that by sharing too much information they are changing Earths future. (That darn do not interfere with inferior races clause.) Any information that is shared comes through secret channels and is given to the Phoenix Foundation. This is what I called my ISO. The Phoenix technology and healing techniques is just some of the information shared by the Rigans. Someone from Riga also informed Anderson to watch out for these five special children and told him what to watch for. Who this person is I do not know. (My muse has not let me in on the secret yet.) In my universe the entire G-Force team is Rigan. All five teammates parents are from Riga. Jason, Princess and Tiny?s parents are Rangers. Jason?s did see his parents killed by a Spectran agent, although he was younger than the 3 or 4 we are shown, because in my world he was on Earth at age 3. Tiny and Princess are a year younger than Jason. Mark is 2 years younger and, here is another big difference, Keyop is 3 years younger than Jason. As for Cronus and Mark being father and son, Cronus being the a** he is, was playing with Mark?s mind again. Cronus did have custody of Mark for about 6 months before Mark was sent off planet with the last exodus to Earth. At this time Cronus is not sure, or is unwilling to tell, how infant Mark came to be in his custody. (Sorry, that darn muse is at it again.) It has only been in the last year that I realized the team had implants that gave them their extraordinary physical abilities. (After listening to the opening credits I realize it was stated every week. How I missed that I do not know). I associated the teams physical abilities to being Rigan. Each team member does have a chip in his or her head, but the chip is the source for Transmutation. The communicator and sweep of the arm is only a focus to help transmute. The team can mute without the aid of the communicator. Mark as Commander has a G1 chip. This chip allows him to transmute teammates near him, within feet, the others do not have this ability.

This is so frustrating. I can not get the last part posted.

Well to wrap it up. The last part kind of said: Hope you enjoyed the read and hope it all made sense. All I can do it try posting again later.

By the way Cep I have just noticed this thread is in The Music Box section. Can you move an entire thread to another section? Obviously, this thread has nothing to do with music. Sorry.

Sure thing where would you suggest?

I knew you would ask that. Even as I wrote it. I do not know? Where do you suggest? Writers block? The Rubber Room? Or should it be in General Discussion? It is not really a Fic.

writers block it is

OMG! Try the Editorial and Essay section of the site instead!.. This aint no fanfic! Its a well thought out, comprehensive and professionally presented ESSAY!! A complete analysis and commentary on and alternate universe!!! This is truly awe inspiring stuff! Ye Gods but you are soooooo ready Cloud! when you have such a well developed setting and completely viable alternate universe , you are so ready to spring forth with many fics! I like the heirachichal system and the Prime! I've seen a few takes on Riga and what it means to be Rigan, but none this comprehensive! It works! oh Bravo cloud for sharing your thoughts and introducing us to your alternate Universe! thankyou thankyou,! and Cep if the thread can withstand it..reckon it can be moved again to"Editorials and Essays" section? Its not an introspective narrative, nor reactive piece of writing but rather an outline of a world and characters Im sure cloud will be writing many fics about!! Besides, it stands out for the essay that it is, rather than gettnig lost in the Writers block.!! whatchya reckon cloud?

Thank you for the move.

Originally posted by clouddancer I do not think Telepathy was a power ever mentioned in BOTP. I just got a sense that Mark had a heightened power of perception. "He seemed to KNOW what was going to happen before the others did"

Okay, I am at this one! It sounds like Mark hs a 'Spidey Sense'! But seriously, I think you have a really interesting idea there, CD. I would love to see the stories you have developed from it!

Sounds like a great place to visit... maybe sometime we can get a group together and share our own universes.. CD can't wait to see what stories you create for us... I'll try to get mine up and going after the fic section gets added.

Ok...done again

We are not worthy..we are not worthy.. Grin You rock, sweets .

blush Thank you Imi. I am the one who is not worthy of that praise.

Originally posted by Springie Funny you should mention telepathy...I agree...but I wrote a fic called "Mind Reading 101"...that had them speaking to each other mentally once they had an update in their implants...

Just had a look at Mind Reading 101. Now, I remeber that one. Must have read it over on FF.net I really liked it and the problems the team had until they adjusted to their channels. This is how I imagine my Telepathy working. Hmmm. I wonder if I can resurrect the whole story line of Mark learning how to use his Telepathy. Think, think think. God so much to do. First, worry about report cards. Good thing summer is almost here.

Speaking of unnatural abilities in Gatchaman universe, I read somewhere on internet that Solaris (Katze in OAV) series had telepathic and telekinetic abilities, but I don't know for sure

Hi there clouddancer, The fic you have written looks like an interesting concept on telepathy, and how Mark has it naturally. You have put some real thought behind it so go ahead and post it! Just get it out the Clouddancer you really have nothing to lose, but we do if you don't share your story! I'm not a totally to canon person, if you can add some imagination to it go right ahead. I do think from BOTP Mark had very good Intuition,this could be a hidden ability for telepathy that he may not have admitted to the rest of the team. I would love to read your fic! Please post it here!

Hello Ebonyswanne, Thank you for your support I have another week of school with my class. Then I will be starting a two week AQ Course (Additional Qualification). Then I will officially start my summer vacation. I will see if I can find the courage to write down any stories from my universe. As I have mentioned before, revealing that part of my soul is very hard, as a child and teenager any stories I wrote down were either laughed at or severely criticised , either by peers or teachers, leaving me to feel .......... I don't know how to say this, uncomfortable is not strong enough ...... to write down anything that others can see. In fact I have noticed it affects me in other parts of my life, as I rarely state my opinion or feelings to others, in fear of being laughed at, criticised or ridiculed. I have to say though, being a member of this forum is definately starting to "open" me up. And after reading everyone else's contributions I am really starting to think about the posibility of writing something down. Now sharing it ....... that will be another matter.

Well you are not alone in the world clouddancer but look at that guy in England recently Paul Pots! He was put down a lot for his talents he was so frightened and then he sang like Pavarotti! He put a sock in Simons mouth for once who never has a good word on idol or any of those shows. The lady who wrote Harry Potter was not a trained writer, she had muse and ran with it. I have had people put me down and tell me not to do things and I have found them at times to be wrong. I made a decision to give more thing a go myself... and well why not! To be creative you need to give some of your sole to make it come to life. The people in this forum are encouraging and you will not be laughed at for trying.. There is only one way(I was scared to put up any fics as my typing is shocking! and I have had absolutely no writing experiance what so ever until three months ago when I wrote something just to try it out, I'm having to go back a bit and fix up errors from earlier stories since I have learned more in word...Beta reading, I didn't know what that was!Then proof reading etc all learning curves with steep angles for me.) The foundation is there for your universe so please write it and you will feel good after you get the story out there...

I was testing. Well Cep I have had time to play with those last few paragraphs of my essay I sent you. Some one suggest, in another thread a while back, I try to find the paragraph, sentence, and then word that was giving me the problems posting. Well I found it. For some reason this site did not like the word drop, as in (I am not sure I could just drop a person) Shrug! who knows why! Wonder if it will work this time.

Hmmm let me try that paragraph again. I am not sure I could just d*r*o*p a person into my stories and they would understand what is happening.

Well it only worked when I put the *** in. Interesting I guess I should have used the word placed or put instead. It is fun learning what is allowed and what isn't. BTW Sorry to anyone who thought this thread was going somewhere. Well it is in a way because I wanted to know which word I could not use in the story fragment I have written. In case it was one I used alot. For some reason in that context the forum does not like it. Yeah I know! I am rambling while I think and type.

Cep and the hosts might be able to figure out why that happened. I was the one something similar had happened to, and once I set it up so my hosts could re-create the problem, it didn't take them much time to fix. Don't know what they did.

I just found another reason why I stopped writing. I found the poems I had written and submitted during my poetry writing course. Criticism on every poems page like: no emotions, flat prose, too clinical, no images, too distant, not personalized, cliche, need to include feelings. Sometimes several of these comments on each page. Of nine poems submitted only one positive comment, about one line of a poem.... nice image. I now remember thinking "why even try....." Why try writing at all? And that was the last time I ever wrote anything personal down. After reading those comments, it almost makes me feel like giving up again. I get a "I can't write anything" feeling, and "everything I write is worthless".

Don't let one critic get you down! Even if they are right (and I'm not saying they are, because I haven't read your poem, I'm just going with the worst case scenario) you still need to write. How else are you going to get better? I'm also a firm believer in writing about things you enjoy. Writing should be FUN, and you should be getting involved with your stories, and not worrying about what other people think. Yes, it's wonderful to have people say that they like what you write (and I'll admit to appreciating positive comments about things I write) but even negative comments aren't so bad, because they help me get better. If you're worried about it, use a beta-reader. Pick someone you trust implicitly, and someone who won't offend you if they give you the honest truth. But from the little of your work I've seen, CD, I would guess that there will be positive comment for whatever you do. I'm still waiting for you to finish the story you posted a bit of a couple of months ago. It intrigued me!

Awww,man, I hate negativity...it kills the wonedrful creativity I see in you, CD! Don't let one negative person get you down...for every negative, there will be many more positives...( I know the negatives are the ones that stay with you longer though) My advice to you is to trash those negative comments... don't ever look at them again...they are hurtful...and who needs that? SJ told me this when I first started, and it has really helped me through when I was feeling negative about writing..."Write to please yourself..." who cares what anyone else thinks...if they enjoy what you've written... it's even better... Now, where's my whip? Ok, a yoyo will suffice...Where's your writing, baybee???

Ohh, CD, don't let you down by the flamers! No matter how good their stories would be, they have no right to flame yours. 'Sides, everyone has his unique style, so it's hard to conciliate all tastes. Keep writting and you'll improve!

CD there will always be people that dont agree with a certain style of writing but please remember there are those of us out here that love to experience every kind of writing and enjoy seeing and sharing work with everyone. Please share your work with us. From your posts it is obvious you are anything but unemotional and normally you find that when someone writes with this much feeling it would be reflected in their other writings. One further point if you're work had "No emotion" then it would not have bothered you so much when they wrote that. You should also know that the role of a critique is to be constructive not negative. Things like those written do not help someone develop a writing style they help destroy a persons willingness to try by stripping confidence. So again I say please share with us and see what reaction you get here. I appreciate it is a scary concept but I am sure you will see a different response here and people will give genuine opinions

Ohhh CD you gave us a taste of the cake and I enjoyed the small morse you threw our way.. Now I want the whole slice and a side of whipped cream to go with it! PLLEEAASSSEEE post a story for us!

Thank you for all your support. I did write that I ALMOST feel like giving up. I just felt that "I'm no good" feeling again for a short while. All your comments has made me feel much better. As for the story writing, well I have been a little busy dealing with the flood clean up in my house, so have not been writing. I am planning on giving what I have written to a friend to review "beta read" before I post. I know you are having a long wait but.... please allow for it, a nervous CD would like the butterflys to stop running rampent before she posts her first story.

We understand, CD. Take as long as you need. We'll be (patiently) waiting!

Originally posted by clouddancer Thank you for all your support. I did write that I ALMOST feel like giving up. I just felt that "I'm no good" feeling again for a short while. All your comments has made me feel much better. As for the story writing, well I have been a little busy dealing with the flood clean up in my house, so have not been writing. I am planning on giving what I have written to a friend to review "beta read" before I post. I know you are having a long wait but.... please allow for it, a nervous CD would like the butterflys to stop running rampent before she posts her first story.

Good, CD, good! Now fly back to work. We are all waiting to read yor stories! Rule no.1 in feedback: IGNORE THE FLAMERS!

Originally posted by amyltrer Rule no.1 in feedback: IGNORE THE FLAMERS!

Easier said than done. Especially when the critic was my poetry professor and I had to get a mark for the course. Yes writing for pleasure is much more enjoyable.

So go for it! Write for pleasure! Or, the Swan's pleasure... oh, wait, you don't *do* smut...

It's up to you to corrup her into it, TJ!

Actually, it was Springie who corrupted me... it's always the quiet ones...

Originally posted by Transmute Jun So go for it! Write for pleasure! Or, the Swan's pleasure... oh, wait, you don't *do* smut...

Before I could write smut, it might help if I was actually getting any smut. Then I might have an experience to write about.

We'll have to send an Owl your way, then....

Yes please. A romantic Owl who loves sailing, swimming, long walks and sitting in front of a fire talking. One who would not be afraind to give me flowers or little things because "he thought of me today." Yes Ebony, that is a reference to your beautiful story Friends and Lovers.

Originally posted by clouddancer One who would not be afraind to give me flowers or little things because "he thought of me today." .

Here the Jigokillers came into my mind! Damm'it Amy, stop making Gallactor evil plans

CD we will try to be patient while you take the time you need to write, From the entries on the IF it is easy to see you have talent so look forward to your first post!

Yes CD, throw us a fragment, poetry, angst, whatever you want. Pleease

ITA! And don't forget to post on the IF too.

I am enjoying CD's entries on the IF Keep up the good work!

Best way to get past the butterflies is to post it and get it over with.

In her defense, CD has been doing a great job posting on the IF!!!

Thank you TJ. As long as I don't have to write smut...... Give me another week or so and then I may be able to post more of that fragment story. I am hoping to hand what I have written to my friend later this week. Then at least, I will get an idea of if I should even try posting it or if I should.... No I won't think that. I will not give up. I might just keep it too myself, but I will not give up.

No, don't keep it to yourself!!!!!!!

Yeah CD some really good picture building words happening in the IF from you...