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SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 26 Apr 2007 13:05
To answer Imi's cry for fics:
All of my stuff can be found here ...
http://groups.msn.com/Clubhouselefanfics/sjsficlets.msnw?action=get_threads
No, it's not all smut - giggle ...
Please, enjoy
SJ
Jaw drops!
Is it already Xmas? Im like a kid in the candy store right now! Look at all those delicious fics! Cant believe you actually got the CSI Xovers done as well!!
Clicked on "its War" and I'm hooked!!
Sheer Perfection SJ!
Thankyou sooo much for this precious link darl!
Thankyou sooo much for this precious link darl!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 9 Aug 2007 11:41
War II is updated here
Enjoy
SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 9 Aug 2007 13:50
and another update...
This may change ... Unsure how I feel about it
SJ
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 9 Aug 2007 15:16
Yeah, I can see how you might want to make a few changes to that bit.
Ebonyswanne
Gatchamaniac
posted 9 Aug 2007 15:56
Which changes TJ????
I know what it's like when something doesn't sit right though...
I could see a plot twist coming there in the last chapter, but it could still happen from another angle...
Who's to say that Melissa doesn't work out where they are at Marks place, and what are the terms she is wanting from Princess???
She let her know she could find her, but didn't leave a real threat or demand...I though this might be coming.
Mark turning up so suddenly and missing Melissa??? Princess did stand up to her though. The underlying story is still there.
Just my thoughts anyway
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 9 Aug 2007 16:01
Keep it coming!!
Crit me and tell me where to fix it ...
I'm not timid - tell me where I fucked it up!
PLEASE ...
SJ
a cry for help
I don't think you fuck up totally SJ,
Princess had a confrontation with Melissa that scared her (naturally being a protective mother) but maybe there could have been the potential of a good twist in the plot there.
Princess calling Mark to talk to him and Melissa arrives he over hears the conversation, and he turns up to find Spectra has taken them??
Now he has to find the traitors in red rangers, and get his family back.(Princess could have the realization that she had put them in danger when she has no choice but to go with Melissa.)
Ahhh but then could Melissa be a double agent really working for Federation...but trying to make it LOOK like she was working for the other side to flush out traitors, but because of her deep cover she had to take the punishment to keep her cover??
she may have made a mistake with her brother...but then that happens...)
So many possibilities!
I'm not sure where you are going with the story plot but if that helps you...all good
she may have made a mistake with her brother...but then that happens...)
So many possibilities!
I'm not sure where you are going with the story plot but if that helps you...all good
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 10 Aug 2007 05:53
I am pulling that last section and totally rewriting it today.
I am desperately unhappy with it...
So please totally IGNORE anything you read in that last piece. PLEASE ....
SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 10 Aug 2007 09:13
Okay - fixed and changed - see here
Thanks
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 10 Aug 2007 09:54
I can tell that you put a lot of thought and effort into this, SJ. It's great! I'm looking forward to the next bit....
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 10 Aug 2007 10:12
SJ, I really liked the changes to that new addition. I now feel some emotional connection to Melissa. (besides the fact that I am a nail biter
)
In the old post I wondered how Melissa would get past the Rangers. I know you said Andrew, but I?m feeling they would still not trust her. And Cronus would have put a back up Ranger out there who HE could trust. This Ranger could then be the one to alert Cronus and/or Mark and get them there just as the events are closing.
Does that thought make any sense?
)
In the old post I wondered how Melissa would get past the Rangers. I know you said Andrew, but I?m feeling they would still not trust her. And Cronus would have put a back up Ranger out there who HE could trust. This Ranger could then be the one to alert Cronus and/or Mark and get them there just as the events are closing.
Does that thought make any sense?
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 10 Aug 2007 11:04
Oh I'm so glad you like the changes.
The next chapter should be fun - but only if it writes as well as I see it in my mind.
I'm dying for some major Eagle action right about now, especially protective daddy Eagle...
Time for the Fury of Mark alongside a feisty Princess ...
SJ
Love the changes!!
And I can't wait to see protective Daddy Eagle do his thing!!!
And I can't wait to see protective Daddy Eagle do his thing!!!
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 10 Aug 2007 13:59
Galactor beware, you don't know what you are letting yourself in for.
You were afraid of the Eagle before you had better start running now.
I belive protective Eagles and Swans will be more deadly than ANY animal in Hunt Mode.
I just hope they can maintain a small amount of control and do not loose their sense of self completely.
I belive protective Eagles and Swans will be more deadly than ANY animal in Hunt Mode.
I just hope they can maintain a small amount of control and do not loose their sense of self completely.
Ebonyswanne
Gatchamaniac
posted 10 Aug 2007 14:10
WOW That left a lot of suspense!
Mark had better get there fast to help his Swan and twins!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 13 Aug 2007 13:48
Updated
As usual - if you don't like it, let me know
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 13 Aug 2007 14:34
Please tell me Melissa got the baby, pleasepleaseplease.
And why only one? What happened so she couldn't get the other? Time? Not enough arms? Whatwhatwhat?
Will Lissa now feel 'Aunty' protection for poor little Eve?
Oh the questions you leave me with. Don't leave it there.
Moremoremore.
Cloud keeps hitting refresh hoping more will appear.
(Takes deep breath. Sorry, I know you said something about two hours sleep.)
Cloud keeps hitting refresh hoping more will appear.
(Takes deep breath. Sorry, I know you said something about two hours sleep.)
I have been following war II and waiting with baited breath for the next instalment.
So many questions.
Where is little Eve?
Will Mark and Jason get to her in time?
I love the way you write SJ hopefully I can do that sometime.
*hugs Sj*
You get some sleep and we will try to wait patiently for the next instalment
*looks down at already bitten nails and then hides them behind her back*
Ebonyswanne
Gatchamaniac
posted 14 Aug 2007 03:34
Wow SJ that was some action and suspense!
It has me wondering if Melissa will turn on Spectra now and get Eve back to her brother and the Swan,somehow...mmmm lots to come I see.
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 14 Aug 2007 13:14
Updated again
You know the drill - tell me if you hate it - tell me if you love it... It all helps me, ya know ...
:wink:
SJ
You know Melissa's vengence for G-force is reminding me alot of Saddi's anger at Mark.
Are you sure Melissa is not another version of Saddi?
Ooooo...I really liked this...so Melissa had some redeeming qualities after all...I can't wait to see how Mark and Princess handle being under the same roof...
Originally posted by clouddancer You know Melissa's vengence for G-force is reminding me alot of Saddi's anger at Mark. Are you sure Melissa is not another version of Saddi?Oh no. There is a big difference between Saddi and Melissa. Sadako hates the Eagle for destruction of her family, and truly wants him dead - she'll take out everyone else in the process - except Shinji. He's her conscience and has the ability to halt her in her tracks or make her ... be ... nice ... sort of. She's also an assassin by profession. Killing is her job and her life - no biggie to her. Had she been the one with the rifle (unlikely - she doesn't like BIG guns) she would have just shrugged, thrown it into the car, put on some perfume and lipstick and gone to her next job. (actually, Saddi would have just walked right up to Anson, put the gun to his head and fired. Screw hiding in the bushes) Melissa, on the other hand, was pretty shocked by it. Melissa is stuck in a peer-group situation. She started a playful (dangerously playful) game of screwing with Mark's mind. She was unjustly associated with the conspiracy plot and therefore decided to go with it - you know, she did the time, why not do the crime, kind of thing. Right now she's kind of ticked at the Federation (mainly Cronus) for the parentage thing ... but ... well ... she's stuck in limbo and is hanging on to the only peope who give a shit (Spectra). Does she really want to be part of it? No. She was raised military on the side of good - the training and upbringing will win out. Maybe. WE'll see - I change my mind from time to time. I understand how you made the comparison, and I will attempt to inject soemthing to separate her character from my Japanese assasin - so thank you so much for bringing that up while I have a chance to change it. GLad y'alll are enjoying it though. I was going for the abduction but ended up not being able to stomach it. I kind of have an attachment to PRin's little kiddies and couldn't even force myself to put the in too much peril.
So we don't lose this thread in the masses I'll stick it.
Ebonyswanne
Gatchamaniac
posted 15 Aug 2007 02:56
Melissa is mixed about her loyalties at the moment!
Maybe this is the beginning of something else with her, the character is taking on a new depth that I like.
shes still got her issues but slowly coming to other side, she could really do some damage to Spectra if something happened to her like... Spectra double crossed her when a Devilstar sent into see that Anson was still loyal to Spectra saw her shoot Anson... ohhh I love plot twists!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 15 Aug 2007 04:39
I got my very own sticky-thread?!
Squeals like a little girlie Swan
Thank you, Cep!!
And ... Glad you're enjoying the story guys ... I have a niggling suspicion that I won't get alot done today - looks like I may be busy here with a couple of meetings ...
Wish me luck, tho. I'm kind of enjoying myself here ...
SJ
Ebonyswanne
Gatchamaniac
posted 15 Aug 2007 05:33
The story is shaping up well SJ, it's like a days of our lives series! LOL
But you have a good plot going there now!
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 15 Aug 2007 08:22
Ooh, SJ, you lucky girl! I've never had a sticky thread...
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 15 Aug 2007 10:20
Originally posted by Cep So we don't lose this thread in the masses I'll stick it.Ummm! Sorry folks but...... What does this mean? What is a sticky thread? I have a sticky keyboard from all the gafawwws I have, when I have a mouthfull of drink, and a sticky trackpad button (is that what it is called) from spilling mango juice on it. I have even seen sticky mice at school, but I have never heard of a sticky thread.
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 15 Aug 2007 10:26
CD, it means that the thread is pinned, or stuck, to the top of the list. Even if it hasn't been updated, it will always remain at the top of the thread listing.
Another example is the Shared Joy thread in the General forum.
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 15 Aug 2007 11:10
Thank ee TJ!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 16 Aug 2007 11:16
Updated
Just a little bit of yaaaawwwwn Mark 'n Prin stuff.
I'm not so good with romantic shit.
Again ... tell me if it needs to go ...
SJ
Oh SJ, I loved this...whatdya mean no good at romance???
I love this line:
more! More! please!
That was Mark, though. Thorough. Dot every i, cross every t. Cover all bases and leave no ends loose. Jason called it anal-retentive. Princess called it adorable.
more! More! please!
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 16 Aug 2007 17:53
SJ I thank you. You updated this AND No!
Just what I needed after the shock I had last night and a terrible day today.
Just tell me you are not going to make Mark squirm too much longer in War. He really needs his Swan back.
I am somewhat hoping Princess might leave the bathroom to find Mark being all fatherly, or trying to, with his two children.
You know talking or singing to them, maybe telling them a story he had heard from his mother.
(For some reason I got a feeling from watching BOTP that Mark could relate well with children. One of my favourite memories of BOTP is Mark pinky swearing with the little boy in the sewers. I can't remember the BOTP title but it was gatch Berg Katse's Success)
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 21 Aug 2007 10:36
Oh SJ, this is sooo good...although I'm cringing at the thought of her breaking her finger...but a girl's gotta do what a girl's gotta do...I hope Mark hears her this time and comes to her rescue...I can't wait to see Trekkie get what he deserves!
I agree with Springie I want to see Princess rescued and that guy get everything he deserves.
Please dont let creepy trekkie fan walk in while she is talking to him *prays hard*
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 22 Aug 2007 04:47
:giggle:
Glad you're having fun with it.
I am happy to be back in the swing of this one ... I will be relooking at War, again, because ... well ... because ... So don't expect an update to that one within the next few days.
I got some GREAT FUCKING NEWS on the CSI front yesterday, which revitalized my want to get back into my CSI/BotP fic.
Oh if we only had spoiler tags, I'd gleefully share the news!!
Let's just say that this little swannie's heart is no longer broken ...
Bring on September 27th!!!! Go Grissom!
SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 22 Aug 2007 09:12
No II has been updated again.
Do enjoy.
SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 22 Aug 2007 12:58
Another update to No II
Just a small part - setting a new scene ...
SJ
Gonna get into trouble for not completing an appraisal form for the DM's ....sigh
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 22 Aug 2007 13:12
Cloud claps her hands.
Oh two, No's in one day.
I'm off.........
Will sending
help with the trouble you're in???
help with the trouble you're in???
SJ I am so enjoying this at the moment and its amazing how you have two epics going at the same time
Oh, SJ, the way you write, I feel like I'm watching it on TV...it's sooooo good!!!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 24 Aug 2007 07:53
Another update
So after my initial excitement about the possible non-demise of my beloved Sara, CSI spoiler sources are fucking with our minds and are trying to make us believe she dies ...
Fortunately the new Season 8 images of Grissom and Nick frantically digging out a body from underneath the car, and TV guide telling us she dies, is not affecting my roll on this fic ...
I do hope you enjoy this next part.
SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 24 Aug 2007 09:23
Another chapter
I'm on a roll today ...
WOOHOO!!
SJ
SJ it was wonderful to wake up to these additions.
I cant wait until the eagle and condor get their hands on the horrible serial killer.
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 24 Aug 2007 13:33
Pant pant pant
Another update , and the last for the day - phew! I seem to be roaring through this today!!
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 24 Aug 2007 14:44
Keep up the good work SJ!
Wish I had some Tim Tam's to ward off any exhaustion you may be feeling.
Have some virtual chocolate instead.
*Cloud hears Homer Simpson's "Ummm, Chocolate."*
I would offer something stronger but I can't have you hung over for tomorrow. I would like at least one more entry before the weekend.
*Cloud turns her blue eyes towards SJ with a pleading look. Please, one more entry before I have to go into work next week. pleasepleaseplease*
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 24 Aug 2007 17:25
SJ, I have had a busy week having my kitchen installed and dealing with workmen and insurance companies etc.
I only just realized today is Friday, and you will not be able to write any more No this week.
*Cloud slinks away from thread, very embarrassed.*
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 24 Aug 2007 18:08
::Chuckles::
No problems, CD.
I haver yet another baseball weekend this weekend with Flash playing yet another tournament (at least this one is only two days, not like last weekend) ...
I do hope this will be the last big run of baseball for the season. In the past twelve days, ten of them have been baseball - damn tiring I tell ya!
I am thinking of staying home on Sunday with the excuse of Housecleaning, so I may sneak in some writing while Josh naps - we'll see ...
THanks for enjoying this guys!!
I'm loving it!!
SJ
yum Tim tams! I knew I forgot to add something to the grocery order.
*goes off in search of some tim tams*
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 5 Sep 2007 18:03
SJ?
Where are you?
You left us? Gone on leave? Muses left you with out a word to write?
It has been a while since you added anything to NO or War.
Please tell me you will start up again soon!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 6 Sep 2007 08:03
Am trying, dahling ....
They just have me busy here at the moment ... grrrr ...
Will update as soon as I get this spreadsheet/workbook done ...
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 6 Sep 2007 09:56
I'm busy too. Dealing with 19 children on their first week of school. Of course I get 2 40 min breaks a day to try and get on and complain/complement people. Hehehe
Good luck with those spreadsheets.
Thought just occured: spreadsheets - sound like something Smutty the Swan and Eagle would need. giggle
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 6 Sep 2007 09:57
Nooooo!
I've been corrupted.
Thinking dirty thoughts in school.
Ahhhhhh!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 6 Sep 2007 12:50
CD - DON'T go throwing ideas like that at my muse when she's being put aside to finish my work ...
She tends to get mean and throws whole new ideas at me when that happens ....
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 6 Sep 2007 13:06
I will try not to but I have just labeled myself as the idea person.
I will throw out ideas for others to use but will do nothing with them as it appears to be too much work.
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 11 Sep 2007 17:16
Okay SJ,
We are in another week.
Do you have time for No?
please, please, please.
TJ and FB reminded me I have the whip still.
I may have to get it out.
SJ I agree with CD can't wait until you update these two. Hope you get time soon
:blush:
Ahh, yeah. I finally had five minutes spare after completing work for the owner - and I got distracted by a CSI spoiler...
Sorry.
Will try and get some done today - If I can get the ideas for "On Trial" out of my head .... Curse my stumbling on to my unfinished fics and actually reading it ...
Toss up - Finish Mark's Criminal Trial, or rescue Princess ??
As for WAR - well. That's on indefinite hold right now. Recent comments have made me somewhat timid to continue it in the manner it is, so I will have to rework pretty much the entire document in order to take out the over-the-top OOC behaviour of the Swan, and eliminate the kids ... and ... sigh.
Thinking about it ... War Part I might have to undergo some changes too ... :groan: crap
I'll head back to NO for now ... Bear with ... The energy was lost in amidst ... ya know.
Anyway. Back to Princess' peril. Let's see if I can resurrect the characters back into what they are supposed to be like ...
Hope to have something for you tomorrow.
SJ
I'll head back to NO for now ... Bear with ... The energy was lost in amidst ... ya know.
Anyway. Back to Princess' peril. Let's see if I can resurrect the characters back into what they are supposed to be like ...
Hope to have something for you tomorrow.
SJ
SJ - now I feel very bad, because it's my crit you're referring to. I hadn't intended you to stop work on it - only to make sure that you didn't recycle themes & plots for future fics...
Keep going with "War" - it is a good story, and I'm one of the people who is eagerly waiting to see how it goes. Remember - mine is only one opinion and you shouldn't feel that you have to completely re-work because of one person's opinion!!!
Perhaps my crit came about because I'd read your Rebellion it's sequel & also the Fluffy fic with Mark's playing around it's so vivid in my mind. (and you aren't solely responsible for Fluffy)
SJ - please please don't take my crit as a personal attck on you or your writing. You're a very talented writer - and some of your fics are amongst my absolute faves ("I Hate Flowers" springs to mind when I think of best BotP fics around). I'm sorry if I did give the impression you should stop and re-write. Please don't.
In "War" the kids are necessary - they provide the necessary impetus for many of the actions.
Though, I still think that Princess wouldn't run away or refuse to listen to Mark, but that's just my reading of the character and we all have our own opinions.
Please, please don't abandon or completely re-write War. It's a good, solid and interesting fic. And I want to find out what happens!
...and...can I add to this? I am anxiously awaiting more "No", too!!!
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 12 Sep 2007 14:40
Please SJ,
I don't want you to rewrite War either.
I think you are doing great with it.
I just think it is time for Princess to stop running, as Maddy puts it, realize the mistake she has made and return to the team (and to Mark).
*Cloud opens her big blue eyes and begs SJ, pweese*
Although, I want you to rescue Princess from Chris first, then return to War.
SJ you are a brilliant writer and I wish I could write as well as you and come up with such wonderful story lines.
I would love to see Princess rescued from Chris in no.
I also understand the CSI spoilers part I know it is only a few weeks before you find out what happens to your favourite character (BTW hope she makes it)
The feel I got from your last update for War is that she was about to stop running and they could start the healing (i could be wrong just how it was feeling to me)
Why not continue with war and see where it takes you before deciding on a complete rewrite?
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 13 Sep 2007 06:56
First up ... Maddy, darlin ..
Yes, your crit gave me the final push to scrap WAR, however, it was already in my mind long before your post.
When I posted the initial section, I did cringe at the whole thing, but it was so well received I figured I'd push on with it ... Then, because of RL character insertion, I couldn't continue on the original path I had intended because, quite basically, I offended the shit out of people with it. I had to rethink, rework, and then ... Well ... My fault ... but it's ended up being somewhat political .. If that makes sense.
Through my own fault, I have lost a lot of my creative freedom with it ... That makes it hard.
Pursed lips and writing struggles resulted and instead of enjoying it, it became almost chore-like.
Now this is ALL MY OWN FAULT - I am not complaining about anyone or thing with that particular part.
Now, the comment that I am rewriting the same old, same old, was the kicker for me. The final nail, so to speak. Your comment that Princess wouldn't react like this, she'd toss aside the visual and implied evidence of infidelity and simply believe anything Mark told her, really burned me. That indirectly implied that I had written poorly, as I honesty thought I'd put in enough to allow her reaction to be believable.
Obviously that screams "rewrite" to me. I need to rework it to make the scenario more clear to the reader.
I'm not upset about it by any stretch of the imagination - I need you to know that. Crits are there for a reason, for you to fix where you flubbed, right? That is what I am taking from your critique - I mean, what's the point of getting an opinion and ignoring it?
It defeats the whole purpose.
I'd much rather pull it apart where it stands, than finishing it and have to go back to it and redo the whole thing. Changing just one small section can change the entire direction of the story, and I simply don't have the energy to pull a double fic ... so to speak. (Well, I don't have the drive to spend that long on one fic, when I have several other ideas waiting for their turn to be written)
I will continue with NO - and I have been trying to. Unfortunately I have been snowed under with work here because I am apparently the only person in the office who knows how to use a computer .... I will try to get at it this morning.
War is in the back of my mind ....
Like FB said, Princess is honestly ready to hash it out with Mark. She called him, remember! Of course it makes sense to have a little apprehension about it, Suddenly she's thrust into his home - after not seeing him for 18 months ... She's commenting about going home because who is she to assume that his offer is permanent?
I dunno about all of you, but I'd certainly have small doubts and insecurities about it ...
In a writing rut? Really, I don't think I am ... I am capable of writing outside of this current theme, and have done so on many occasions ...
Fluffy - well .... I don't really, honestly know where to begin with it. It's a round robin, you only write with what you've been given from the author(s) before you. It's a collaborative effort between writers, not a solo-trek. There is a lot about Fluffy I honestly am uncomfortable with, but had to continue with because of the game. So I feel somewhat deflated that you would compare that to my own stuff.
As for Remembering - aside from the fact that it's 6 years old, and I have written several completely different stories since - the basic plot may seem somewhat similar to this, but they are different. The only comparison is the kid and that she's not in G-Force anymore.
How she got there stemmed from different circumstances. The conflict is different for much different reasons.
And, hey .... if CSI is allowed to rework their previous story-lines, why can't I?
:smile:
Ahh, shit - gotto actually work now ...
I actually *want* to look again at WAR, honestly it's me ... okee?
In a writing rut? Really, I don't think I am ... I am capable of writing outside of this current theme, and have done so on many occasions ...
Fluffy - well .... I don't really, honestly know where to begin with it. It's a round robin, you only write with what you've been given from the author(s) before you. It's a collaborative effort between writers, not a solo-trek. There is a lot about Fluffy I honestly am uncomfortable with, but had to continue with because of the game. So I feel somewhat deflated that you would compare that to my own stuff.
As for Remembering - aside from the fact that it's 6 years old, and I have written several completely different stories since - the basic plot may seem somewhat similar to this, but they are different. The only comparison is the kid and that she's not in G-Force anymore.
How she got there stemmed from different circumstances. The conflict is different for much different reasons.
And, hey .... if CSI is allowed to rework their previous story-lines, why can't I?
:smile:
Ahh, shit - gotto actually work now ...
I actually *want* to look again at WAR, honestly it's me ... okee?
SJ its your work and if thats what you want to do, you go ahead
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 13 Sep 2007 11:09
Thanks FB!
I'll see what happens with it ... perhaps only minute sections will be tweaked and I can go from where I am in it. I will have to re-read it and make that decision ...
I have a CSI-minded individual looking over the CSI characterizations in NO, as I am a little uncomfortable with how I have written Grissom and Brass, but that won't impact the story from here, just change up the body language and tweak the words to make them come out a little better ...
Those changes, however, won't take effect until this fic is completed. This is essentially a BotP fic, so the CSI changes will be minor (except maybe Sara - she will have a bigger impact on the remainder of things ... I love Sara)
That said - I do hope that my fellow CSI person here at Gatch will not be too upset with which criminalist is responsible for this madness ...
:wink:
When I told Mona about it a week ago, she actually squealed and said "oh PERFECT"
IS that enough of a spoiler?
:giggle:
Back to the style development sheets for Spring 2008 - only 50 to go ....
SJ
lol Unfortunately I never followed CSI so that little spoiler meant nothing to me. Will just wait for the next instalment and enjoy the forthcoming surprise
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 14 Sep 2007 11:48
Okay .... so ....
It's updated again ...
Click me
Hope you enjoy
SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 14 Sep 2007 13:48
Another Update
Enjoy ...
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 14 Sep 2007 15:45
Originally posted by SJ_SwanJun That said - I do hope that my fellow CSI person here at Gatch will not be too upset with which criminalist is responsible for this madness ... When I told Mona about it a week ago, she actually squealed and said "oh PERFECT" SJJust read your next two updates. They are great and all I can say is: it is who I thought it might be or who I wanted it to be. I THINK !!!!!! Unless you are going to do another twist on me. I agree with Mona (who Mona is I don't know, but I agree with her) PERFECT.
Ok so remembering what was written earlier Inow think i know who ther serial is.
Just have to wait and see if I am right.
BTW SJ thank you for the additions!
Wow...I've been gone for a few days... and it looks like I have a lot of reading to catch up on...
I am a happy camper!
I am a happy camper!
Its always nice to come home to or wake up to fic updates!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 17 Sep 2007 13:49
Another Update
Curse work for making me .... work ....
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 17 Sep 2007 14:47
Thank you SJ
It is great as usuall.
We get to check in on all the major players, except Princess, ans see what progress they are making.
Oh...very diabolical...just where do you get these ideas from? I wouldn't have thought of teh soapy washcloth thing...you have truly developed a frightening foe for our Swannie!
I got home from a horrible day at work to a wonderful update by SJ
thank you!
thank you!
been enjoying both fics... can't wait to read more on either!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 19 Sep 2007 09:35
Updated
Hope you like ....
Thank you SJ!
it was amazing and hmm looks like my suspicions were right
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 19 Sep 2007 13:34
Another Update
Enjoy kiddies ...
SJ
Yay! I was write! Woohoo! All that work in my job has not gone to waste.
Now just need someone to get that horrible person
send the
or better yet the
and
or better yet the
and
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 20 Sep 2007 09:00
Updated again
Enjoy
SJ
Now i feel like its Christmas!
Thank you SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 26 Sep 2007 12:09
Updated
Enjoy
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 26 Sep 2007 13:32
Short and Sweet
Time to turn up the angst a little ....
wow been gone for awhile and it's update season!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 27 Sep 2007 08:27
Another installment
I'm on a little bit of a roll here ... wish me luck in getting more done today...
SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 27 Sep 2007 13:09
Pant pant pant
Another update for today.
Enjoy!!
CSI PREMIERE TONIGHT!!!!
SJ
But but SJ he has to be stopped dont let him kill our swan.
:pouncehuggles: thank you for the updates though it was wonderful to read after a day at work.
I so agree FB, it's great to have so many talented writers out there. Maybe sometime I can have more then one fic actually done!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 28 Sep 2007 12:33
Updated again
Almost there, kids ... Almost there.
WOOHOO!!
SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 28 Sep 2007 13:35
And another update for today to cap off my week.
Just a short one to kick off the beginning of this epic's conclusion ...
Enjoy
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 29 Sep 2007 13:14
SJ
You have been buisy while I have been away!
I keep wanting the Jason and Mark to do their best destruction on "Chris" then you add something more and I want the criminalist to get him and "make him suffer."
I love where this is going, and after watching this seasons opener of CSI, I don't think you need to change a thing in your fic.
I was worried you would feel you might want to if a different outcome happened.
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 2 Oct 2007 09:43
Finally had some time
Clicky for update
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 2 Oct 2007 10:25
SJ,
I have never pictured Sarah as a Condor but you really paint it well in this part. I can now see the similar attitudes.
Now don't leave us hanging, more .... more ..... more
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 2 Oct 2007 13:47
Just for you, CD ...
Update
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 2 Oct 2007 18:39
Thank you SJ.
Go, Jason.
Hodges deserved that. How dare anyone say the Condor is a coward.
SJ this is amazing and go condor!
I cant wait to see how they get her location from him as I dont see him willing telling his comrads where she is.
This has been an enjoyable read. It will be sad when it ends.
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 3 Oct 2007 05:36
Originally posted by Firebird SJ this is amazing and go condor! I cant wait to see how they get her location from him as I dont see him willing telling his comrads where she is. This has been an enjoyable read. It will be sad when it ends.I so agree FB!!!!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 9 Oct 2007 13:21
Well ... after taking a sabbatical from the internet and everything else for over a week ... I figured I would post this, and then trudge through everything I've missed so far.
Looks like things have been jumping ... shit ... over 400 posts to go through.
WIsh me luck.
SJ
Oh BTW - click here for the update
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 9 Oct 2007 15:04
Great SJ!
Our Boys have calmed down and are now starting to use their brains not their muscles.
Now what is on that feed that has Archie so upset?
Good question CD cant wait til the next instalment to find out.
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 25 Oct 2007 13:45
It's been a while, but I've been busy ...
But here's a short one ....
Time to bring Princess home.
Here's the update
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 25 Oct 2007 14:51
Thank you for the update SJ.
I have been thinking about this story recently.
So Archie was excited, not concerned.
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 4 Apr 2008 11:16
Okay ... SO I tried. Oh God did I try.
It is hard to get back into a story that you've taken such a long hiatus on.
But Princess has been kidnapped for too long
I do hope y'all like this...
Clicky for fic
SJ
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 4 Apr 2008 13:20
It is good to see you get back to this SJ.
I guess you are feeling in the mood again, now that you got to see a new CSI episode last night.
I do hope y'all like this...I confess I don't know anything about CSI, but I like it!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 11 May 2008 06:37
Hey guys... I had a spare 20 mins so I penned this..
I could call it smut, and although the subject is smut, it really isn't all that dirty...
Enjoy
clicky here
SJ
Wow. Definitely smut!
And you only needed twenty minutes?
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 12 May 2008 13:22
Very enjoyable SJ.
Now who, and why needs to be answered
Woohoo!! This one definitely deserves a back story...I am hoping you'll write some more!!!
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 12 May 2008 18:48
Originally posted by clouddancer:giggle: I wanted to leave it open to interpretation ... Choose your raptor! Thanks for the kudos, guys ... It was a fast write, but it felt good.. No back story, tough. This is as it stands... SJVery enjoyable SJ. Now who, and why needs to be answered
I agree with CD and Springie....I want more!!! The curiosity is piqued.
Okay team ...
Now I am far enough into this story and nearly finished enough to give you a linkie-pooh to it
Revenge is here
When you have time, and if you have the inclination, check it out for me and let me know what you think. It is a little on the darker side, and it is probably somewhat out of character (although understandably so) ...
Please -- enjoy ...
SJ
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 4 Mar 2009 02:07
So .... Once upon a time, in a brain long long ago..
Remember back, oh say ... a year or two ago, when I foolishly decided to attempt to pump out two epic fics at the same time and then faltered with my usual run of writers block and just ... well ... stopped?
Yes, I know you are all thinking "Meh, she does it all the time" ... But guess what? They're DONE!
Yes ... oh yes. ... I have finished!!
I've thrown them up at ff.net. If you feel so inclined, please clicky and read!
My CSI/BotP one can be found here
And the second part of War (When the War is Over), which has only one chapter to post will be finalized today .... Clicky here for this one.
Wow ... what is this feeling I have inside me? Is it a sense of accomplishment??!!
:squeall:
SJ
Congratulations! I've been writing lately, but now I can catch up on my reading some, so your timing is excellent!
Can't wait to finish reading these two fics SJ. Still I must stick with my ban on reading until I too can finish another fic.
The bait just keeps getting better and better.
sj - I think I left a little review thingie but have to say again I love love love the CSI/BotP Fic! I love it. love. love. love. love.
Am working my way through "after the war" and am cursing my schedule because I am so busy i can't even sneak off and read during lunch. i have to travel tomorrow, so maybe i can read at the airport.
you just have this amazing way of pulling me through a story - it always feels like a cliffhanger and i am breathless getting to the next chapter. (and even your self-proclaimed, toned down "non-smut" is pretty darn hot!).
you rock, girl!
clouddancer
Gatchamaniac
posted 5 Mar 2009 06:53
SJ I am looking forward to seeing how you finished the CSI/BOTP fic.
I am busy for the next few weeks, but March Break is looming and hopefully I will have time then. Assuming all goes well for my brother.
I am busy for the next few weeks, but March Break is looming and hopefully I will have time then. Assuming all goes well for my brother.
SJ_SwanJun
Forum Goddess
posted 5 Mar 2009 13:31
Heeeyyy thanks guys!!
I have to say, somewhat embarrassedly, that I actually only went through and finished both fics because of a solitary review by princessmollie on FF.net. I am by no means a review whore, but a simple random review out of the blue just kicked me in the ass and all of a sudden I kicked back in to writing.
And, hell. Two fics I hadn't even looked at, much less thought about in terms of completing, in over a year suddenly flew through my fingers as though I'd never stopped them.
Now I'm pumping through another old one "Rebellion" with this mass of energy that really ... wow ... It's been such a long while since I've been so into writing like this ...
:grins:
It feels so good!
SJ
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