Bradbury's Jar Prompt #280

11 Replies 74 Views 0 Likes 6 Participants Last post by Ebonyswanne 9 May 2017 23:42
GrumpyGhostOwl
GrumpyGhostOwl Master Boardie posted 6 May 2017 16:46
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GrumpyGhostOwl
GrumpyGhostOwl Master Boardie posted 7 May 2017 07:10
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ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 7 May 2017 11:37
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GGO: Twitching and trying to avoid commenting on the political statement, especially since I'm making assumptions as to who you're talking about. On the story, that line does seem to be intended as tongue in cheek, but I can see how a group of mostly orphans might not particularly be impressed by it.
GrumpyGhostOwl
GrumpyGhostOwl Master Boardie posted 7 May 2017 16:52
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I think that when you are a politician, it doesn't matter what you say, there will always be somebody ready to turn it into a news story of some kind or another. Some politicians are better at generating certain kinds of news stories than others, particularly in the realm of satire. (Let's face it, since Mr Abbott was pushed out of the PM job, Australian politics has been thoroughly dull -- after all, no-one can be the Suppositry of all Wisdom.*) Lady Bracknell is a perfectly dreadful character. She's often played by a male actor in drag. She says outrageous things and believes them. Wilde wrote her as a caricature of the English upper class. The line in question is a play on words - it plays on the expression "to lose a parent," as though you could put a family member aside and forget where you left them - and it occurred to me that someone who actually had lost their parents might not find the line as funny as someone who hadn't. * Yes, Tony Abbott did actually say that during his tenure as Prime Minister of Australia. Kept an entire nation chuckling into our breakfast cereal for days.
Katblu42
Katblu42 Forum God posted 8 May 2017 05:58
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Anyone who has ever worked at a place like a theme park will tell you it is very possible to lose a parent . . . but they are usually found again pretty quickly!! Wink2 There are even Lost Parents meeting points and radio codes (for the parent and the child depending on who approaches you to tell you they've lost someone). Since this prompt was posted I've had the Paul Kelly song running through my head. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fq7X_6PlilE
Daniella T
Daniella T GatchaFreak posted 8 May 2017 06:05
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You guys have now made me want to go and read Oscar Wilde again! I remember I found the line quite funny, but you're right, it might sound cruel to orphans.
GrumpyGhostOwl
GrumpyGhostOwl Master Boardie posted 8 May 2017 16:53
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Originally posted by Katblu42 Since this prompt was posted I've had the Paul Kelly song running through my head. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fq7X_6PlilE
LOL! And now I've got Robbie Robertson's Unbound running through mine because of the lines, I am lost Has anybody seen me? I suppose there are worse earworms to have.
Ebonyswanne
Ebonyswanne Gatchamaniac posted 8 May 2017 17:30 (edited 9 May 2017 23:44)
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"Jun, whats taking so long?" "Ken, it goes like this, its an art form setting explosives, you want to make it out of here in time." "Live life dangerously, hurry up." "Joe, I'm working as fast as I can. Oppsss." "Thats never a good word." "Ken, right now I'm working with dodgy fuses, who has been careless with my stash?" "I dunno, but I'm seeing trouble Joe." "The little shit is going to be a dead kid you mean, Ken. I bet he avoids the Snack J for a week after this." "RUN!!!!" "Huh?" "Huh?" "Its going to blow now, bolt! Do I have to push up both off this sinking ship? MOVE IT!!" A few minutes later.... Kaahhhhboooommmmm (Totally dialogue... experimentation.) Ebony. Wink
ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 8 May 2017 18:25
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Ebony: The experiment seems successful to me. Elfsmile1
GrumpyGhostOwl
GrumpyGhostOwl Master Boardie posted 8 May 2017 19:52
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Experimentation is always good. Dialogue-only can be very descriptive. Nice one.
ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 9 May 2017 14:46
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Ebonyswanne: Yay for experimentation Smile And surviving, LOL
Ebonyswanne
Ebonyswanne Gatchamaniac posted 9 May 2017 23:42
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Its an opportunity to do a skit and try out new things to improve. I've been working on dialogue. So I figure one way is cut out everything else and see if it changes how I write it-- Identify who's speaking. Wink
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