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Last post by rachel 17 Apr 2014 12:14
ElectricWhite
Gatchamaniac
posted 9 Apr 2014 05:44
Rachel, I am curious to know more about what's happening! I'm looking forward to reading more and finding out!
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 9 Apr 2014 11:40
Rachel, this is a very interesting story! I gather that Odile's father is sabotaging Jun's chances to advance his daughter's own? It seems strange that he's so obsessed with the ISO, and it also seems strange that Nambu wouldn't be willing to evaluate the girl on her own merits.
And I'm curious to see how the opening scene plays in.
Oooooo...Odile' s father seems like a Galactor agent. I hope Odile isn't an agent, as well! I'll stay tuned...Jun could be in a heap of trouble! Great work!
EW- Glad to hear that you enjoyed it!
TJ- Next part will be the answer.
Springie- Odile's father is not subordinate to Galector but a cooperative(not really) partner. hee.
Please enjoy the show how Joe fall into Odile.
It might be pretty interesting.
Springie- Odile's father is not subordinate to Galector but a cooperative(not really) partner. hee.
Please enjoy the show how Joe fall into Odile.
It might be pretty interesting.
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 10 Apr 2014 06:40
This is certainly an interesting background for Jun! I would be very worried for her if I didn't know where she eventually ended up....
ElectricWhite
Gatchamaniac
posted 10 Apr 2014 06:59
I agree with TJ. But I still found myself worrying what might happen if Odile found out about Nambu's interest in Jun!
Tee.hee.
No one is worry about the poor black pony of $25,000.
Odile will not welcome her father's present to soothe her.
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 11 Apr 2014 09:49
Why am I picturing the Godfather?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q2CX20bBNJE
Awk!! TJ!! I've googled it!! It's a real horse head!!
People said it was picked up from a dog food factory.
Fortuately, nothing(?) had happened to the pony.
< Chapter 6. Here goes the Prince>
After 5 days, Nambu sent documents to the Ministry of health, welfare and Family Affairs to adopt Jun and Jinpei, but he was announced that the orphanage head presented negative opinion on him.
She commented that he was on strong suspicion of having sexual purpose upon the girl.
Actually, loosing Jun was a great loss for the orphanage home.
She was the eldest girl in the house. She was pretty useful in many ways and the woman needed to protect her elegant French nails from housekeeping labors.
Jun was an essential component of her life, a little lamb allowed by Lord in the heaven above as a reward of her devotion and piety.
O, please forgive me of my sins as usual and empower me to fight against that Satan. Father, grant that I may always desire more than I accomplish......Amen.
Nambu was staring at the pile of documents displayed on his desk by Christine, clenching his trembling fists. His ragged breathing was filling his office.
Three sets of documents were sent from Utoland social services department.
One was a set of bills which were registration fees and school uniforms of Biron School of Science.
Though Nambu had not ever seen a real bill of registration in his school days, but he could notice that they were fakes because its address was not the campus itself.
Christine said it was an address of a private cram school specialized only for Biron applicants.
That chicken head must have clicked the first URL link under the search box with an small AD tag. The frayed golden crest embroidery on Jun's jacket crossed his mind.
These shits were the reason why the head allowed Jun to attend Biron School.
Another documents were about invisible staff's salary supports.
The other documents were monthly requests for assistance of meal boxes for orphan's lunch and supper.
But the number of orphans on the paper was twice larger than it should be.
Nambu felt sudden pain in the back of his head looking at the bottom of the documents. All of them bore Jun's signature.
Christine shed tears looking at the dried water stains on several papers.
CCTV data were flooding into screen monitor sent from the City Hall. Jun was stepping into welfare division. He nervously turned off it and threw the remote controller on the floor.
The orphans must have relied on the meal boxes for every three meal. The tight schedule of Biron School would not have allowed Jun to prepare the meals for the children.
A vivid scene appeared in his vision that the head was threatening Jun, if she wanted to continue her studies then sign the request form of meals.
In his imagination Jun was walking around the noisy small factories and dimly lit dusty warehouses to deliver remaining boxes to workers and collect bucks by selling them......at sunset?
Suddenly Numbu's breathing stopped. What a naive bastard!! He cursed himself.
Screaming brutal cries of no, he jumped up from his chair and ran to the door. Christine's shouting voice caught his back neck.
"You've got to see this!!!"
She handed a piece of folded paper to him as she covered her eyes with her left hand. Nambu snatched it from her.
It was a copy of a written oath.
Trembling letters were saying that hereby I Jun himuro guarantee 5 years of faithful labor from 6:00 am to 3:00 pm six days a week, at minimum legal wage first, 3% increase per each year,
lodging charges of $20 will be deducted per each stay, meals, transportation and medical covers were not included, after immediate graduation of Biron schoo......Jun...Jun!! you fool!!
Invisible hands of devil were seizing his neck. 6am to 3pm?? Nambu got goose bumps.
The bitch must have known that Jun would not flatly leave the house at 3 o'clock.
Christine explained about it with a quivering voice.
Two years ago, Jun brought a wandering toddler from her study tour. As soon as her school teacher left the house, the head had Jun write the oath claiming the future loss of orphanage budgets by accepting him.
As the small poor boy did not apart from her at all, and Jun had not aware of that the government funds were allocated by the number of orphans then, so she wrote down what the woman spat out.
Now Jun noticed that any contract made between minors and adult had no legal effect and the head could be subject to punishment for making illegal labor contract with minor.
However the piece of paper was yet enough strong to tie up a pigeon-livered girl.
Yesterday, the head threatened Jun shaking the oath in front of Jun's face, she should keep her promises if she did not want to be punished for embezzlement of meal supports, showing videos of Jun selling the boxes.
A young female who didn't have her protector was always an easy prey. The rusty iron chains were tangled up complicatedly than he expected.
However he was a man of plans and also was a mature adult. The only thing he needed was time to set his strategies.
No, he didn't need so-called strategies at all upon that kind of person.
After two hours, the head was begging his mercy kneeling down on the floor. All he did was just presenting his name card.
The factory guys told her that he was a one of a TV show hosts which went off the air two months ago-Science Magic, and as long as she remembered an internet news article said that he was a head of......Eh...ISO PR department.
But she clearly remember the faded picture in the dusty newspaper brought by a bootleg liquor dealer. He was sitting between a comedian and Idol girl groups.
How could he be the deputy executive director of ISO?
Christine dragged a half minded woman into her car and start the engine to chase after Nambu.
Christine suggested Nambu to adopt Jun and Jinpei under her name, but he refused it.
Then she advised Nambu not to call the police or accuse the head to avoid noisy things and promised him to clean up these dirty beings and care after the orphanage home in her typical professional manner.
Nambu finally agreed to her. The head left the office with faltering steps without turning back as soon as the final procedure of adoption had finished.
Shaking hands with the officer, he noticed a yellow cardboard paper tucked under a pile of documents.
He slowly pulled out it then he found three marks of disaproval stamps, above his name.
Her warm heart, her kindness, her responsibility, her beauty, her talent, her youth, every part of her blessed nature was eating her up alive.
Eventually he lost himself. Bad timing, why that cigarette box must be in this guy's shirts pocket??
Nambu politely asked him a cigarette and lighter as taking out his cell phone and stepped out of the office.
He strode to the wide window at the end of the corridor where Christine and Jun sitting on the chair in each other's embrace.
Jinpei was sleeping resting his head on grandma's thigh. Christine saw Nambu walking along the hallway speaking with someone in phone......Leon? ......that Leon??
He stopped in front of Jun and bit a cigarette then lit it up. She scowled at him shooting a harsh warning gaze of disapprovals, but he simply rolled his eyes from her.
Christine hurriedly looked at the ceiling. Luckily fire alarm was near the office entrance however it was obvious that he was not aware of it. Is he crazy?
Nambu was blowing a cloud imagining his favorite scene in the old movie.
He knew he would be grilled by her at least a month, but it was definitely worth to do.
Jun was sending a great admiration with her shimmering beautiful emerald eyes to the man who was speaking directly with the chief commissioner of police.
At least this moment he could pay everything for her.
Looking back and forth at Nambu and Jun, Christine figured out what was happening.
She narrowed her eyes at Nambu's neck tie.
Clearly it was blue stripped one in the morning, but now he was wearing the red tie bearing exquisite arabesque patterns which was always tucked in his office closet for special occasions.
Why this boy must put on that tie of all things given by me - as a prize of stopping smoking ten years ago?
She felt strong sudden impulse to swoop on him then strangle his neck, who just had shoved a ton of dishes in her sink. Sleeping little Jinpei saved his life.
After conversations, he spoke Christine in a deep bass voice readjusting his suit jacket temperately
"Please bring my children to new home. I go back to the lab.05, because all the staffs are standing by waiting for me. The final test operations of Phoenix engines must be done by today."
As Jun rewarded him with even greater expressions of respect on her radiant face, Nambu could blow away the upcoming troublesome consequences of his rashness.
Nambu thought that he paid for it enough by accepting Christine's long lectures which started around at 11:00pm to 2:00am and being criticized for two months, but Jun and Jinpei were also charged for it after 6 years.
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 13 Apr 2014 12:50
I'm sorry, I'm a bit confused... who is Christine?
Nambu's secretary. A silvery woman. She may be elder than Nambu at least 15 years.
If there is awkward expressions or nonsense, please notify me.
As I emphasized before, English is not my first language.
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 14 Apr 2014 10:14
SO Raymond thinks Odile killed Jun? And his relationship with his daughter certainly seems inappropriate, to say the least. What happened to her mother?
Odile Killed Jun? What(the word victim?) makes you think so?
If you point it out, I think I need to revise around there.
Jun is now adopted by Nambu and maybe she is with Ken and Joe.
For her mother, she was killed in an accident, maybe next next chapter will explain it.
Lastly, "inappropriate", do you mean the ruby ring or what? In Korea some fathers who do not hide their affection to his daughter brings presents to her when she starts her first period. If her father's behavior is not comprehensible, please let me know. I had seen a father and daughter a little bit similar with them.
Thank you for your comments I really appreciate!
ElectricWhite
Gatchamaniac
posted 14 Apr 2014 11:10
Rachel -- I didn't know about the tradition about the ruby ring until now. There is nothing in our customs for a father to commemorate a girl becoming a woman in this manner. In fact, we generally frown upon a father knowing about his daughter's periods unless it's absolutely necessary that he knows. (For example, if the girl's mother had died and the father is raising his daughter by himself, or if something is wrong and the girl has to go to the doctor.)
I think it's safe to say that most of the people at this site are not familiar with that custom, so we would automatically assume that the father was having a sexually inappropriate relationship with his daughter. (I'm not blaming anybody here -- this is turning out to be great opportunity for us to learn about each other's culture!)
Ah, I got it EW. Thank you for the explanations. Actually, traditional Korean fathers, too.
These days a buzzword is a hot issue in Korea- Ttal(daughter)-Babo(a fool). Many Korean fathers call themselves as Ttalbabo. It means a father who always becomes a fool in front of his daughter and shows great affection to her. Before late 90's, about 10~15 girls among 100 were killed by abortion. In my school days, if there is 100 girls, number of boys were almost 120. Parents did not welcomed girl if they had one already. These days Korean young men really frustrated about finding their brides. Even though the government forces every woman to marry, one of five men can't marry. If 1/4 girls do not want to marry because of her career, freedom or not to be involved with husband's family(Traditionally Korean mothers want to have her daughter-in-law under her control. Of course, they do not want their own daughter to be touched by her mother-in-low. ironic.), it means only 65% of men could find his bride. Young females want to marry a man who has strong economic power, so there is a strong possiblity for the man of 64th is having difficult times to find his girl friend. He has to wait long until 64th girl notices that she is not good enough to have an ideal groom.
Anyway, these days daughters are more popular in Korea, so the number of father who celebrates his daughter's first menstruation is increasing. And I regarded it is from western culture. So EW your comment was a little shocking to me, too. Kinda interesting. Now I consider to revise it as a birthday present.
ElectricWhite
Gatchamaniac
posted 14 Apr 2014 12:17
Originally posted by rachel Now I consider to revise it as a birthday present.You might not have to go that far, Rachel. I think you'll be okay if you say in the story that it's a custom in the country where the story is happening. That should keep anybody else who doesn't know about that custom from getting confused.
I think it sounds like a sweet custom, now that you have explained it. But I agree that without some explanation, it seems odd.
Interesting...I had never heard of that custom, either! I'm glad that Jun is getting away from the orphanage. I am looking forward to seeing how Ken and Joe react to her!
Transmute Jun
Queen of the Bird Missiles
posted 15 Apr 2014 07:18
I had not heard of this custom either. It definitely has a different impact here in the West! Thank you for explaining this cultural difference, Rachel.
I decided to go with the ruby ring without revision.
Thanks to all of you. >_<
< Chapter 8. What happened to us>
Last two months, Nambu fell into her completely.
Gloomy girl had restored her long lost brightness surprisingly soon with her foster father's love and attention.
Christine was also happy not to hear whining voices of private tutors on her cell phone. Ken and Joe seemed that they did not want to show Jun and Jinpei any embarrassing moments.
Soon the tutors confessed that they'd got nothing to teach her, so she spent her days Exploring Nambu's library.
When Nambu got back to home from work, she made a beeline chasing his every steps. She was always full of curiosity and questions. Sometimes she even detected minor errors in his old treatises in her soft melting voice.
Then he just let out satisfactory laughs.
Sometimes they held sudden battles to present evidences against each other messing up the shelves and making the piles of books collapsed.
These matches usually ended in his victory. Then Jun started running away from him playfully, He chased after her always several steps behind letting Jun escape into her room.
Whenever he teased Jun with future visits to ISO, she surrendered to him slowly unlocking the doors. Then he arrested her wrist and dragged Jun to his library.
Her happy squeaky screams tickled his ears like a feather and puffed his chest out. Pleasant pain on his stomach erased mental bruises caused by stressful daywork.
One day Jun dropped on the stairs on the way back to library. Nambu turned his head. She was crying. Surprised, he grabbed her shoulder kneeling down himself.
"Jun. Why are you crying? Did I do something wrong?"
Nambu said worriedly.
"I...I just can't believe it....I'm not dreaming..."
Her shoulders heaved as she sobbed.
"No, you are not."
He said in whispers.
"Jun, tomorrow morning I'll bring you to my office in ISO. You'll see the test operations of God Phoenix engines, late at night with Chief Anderson and only several engineers.
Please stop crying or you get baggy eyes. I want to show my pretty daughter to the staffs all day long..."
He wiped out tears on her cheeks with his hands. Nambu tucked Jun in his embrace. She is safe in my territory. No one can harm her.
For the first time, he felt himself fulfilled as a mature man. He already had noticed how two boys looked at her, but he was the only man who could offer what she needed and wanted.
Wishing that this moment last forever, boys were still boys not growing up and she would be always in his arms, Nambu tightened his embrace.
It was late afternoon in his office, three months had been passed since adoption.
"Now I see why that evil one did not mention the meal boxes while threatening my Jun!!"
Pounding his fist into the desk, Nambu shouted suddenly.
A silver old woman almost dropped a coffee mug frightened at the banging sound. Christine looked at him with a side long glance. God, he started it again.
"She held it back in the case of that Jun would accuse her to schoolmates!!
If Jun had done it, Odile would have threatened my Jun to say "I'm such a bad girl I lied to slander Princess Odile". I can vividly see her sobbing face with innocent expressions!!!! What a......
I need to investigate why the number of participants limited to only two students for several schools specialized in science education . How do you think about it!"
He was chocked by his own imaginations. Regarding the limits, at least she could tell it was too much doubt because the former chief wanted the event to be widely spread as much as possible.
Apparently the Biron students would have eat up all the prizes if there had not been limits of participants.
The competition was a some kind of fore election campaign.
The posters distributed to schools had born Nambu's picture to entice student's attentions. Ridiculously, on the every outdoor billboard there was the former ISO chief, a future politician.
But Christine couldn't find any comprehensible reason to counter Nambu's another "absurd" guesses.
There was no possibility that Odile had not noticed about the meal boxes, without doubts. His guesses might be right.
However, even though Jun had revealed Odile's wicked deal, no one in the school would have not listened to her.
Christine couldn't forget Jun's bitter face during the last visit to quit the Biron School of Science.
Although Odile was absent for school, no classmate said goodbye to her. Biron School separated students by sex, it was a girl's jungle rather than a classroom.
When the teacher asked the students to say goodbye to Jun, every girl pretended as if they had heard nothing.
Some of them didn't hide their amused face, several girls looked down at their books, and other girls just stared at the empty whiteboard behind Jun with unreadable masks.
What happened to those girls?
Christine managed to repress her astonishment. But when Christine entered to the teacher's room, she could figure out what was going on.
Every teachers pretended to be busy on their own affairs, they were ignoring Jun's existence. She could see the same faces that she had seen in the classroom.
So what happened to those adults?? Did a fourteen years old girl really arranged all of these? Nonsense. What is happening to our world?
As soon as finishing the procedures needed, Christine almost escaped from the place with Jun.
These days Ken and Joe barely brought headaches to Nambu but invisible Odile did.
She has no brother nor sister, which meant Odile was the only heiress of Raymond. His elder brother Robert Stangate had three sons and two daughters but all of them didn't seem to be enough qualified for the crown.
If Raymond won the battle, Odile would be the queen of Vamplate Kingdom. He would willingly kneel down on her after winning the tournament.
As long as ISO figured out, yet two brothers were puppets of their uncle, the real owner of the Vamplate. The lord was enjoying the games between the two princes, somewhere in the pacific ocean.
"Anything from him yet? It's already been three months."
Nambu's voice disturbed her train of thoughts.
"No, still not. I think it's time to give up. As he repeatedly said, it may be a minor thing that we don't need to figure out what happened in the investigation room for two hours in the police station."
Christine sighted.
"There is no minor thing. I need to collect every little detail about Odile......If Raymond beats his brother, she will be a great future threat to ISO or else.
You always say she is a just fourteen years old adolescent girl, but that's the problem itself in my point of view. You can keep saying like that because you've not seen her yet.
Sometimes I rather hope Robert Stangate would win the war. Ha......it is a terrible nightmare too, however he has spent more than 2/3 of his life!!
At least it is guaranteed by God that he'll be six feet under the ground within 20 years or so......"
Nambu said staring at the rising steam from the mug on the desk.
"By the way, when is he going to quit chasing the tail of minor criminals?"
Sipping his hot coffee, he asked Christine.
"I don't know. Why don't you ask him by yourself if you are that curious about him. Actually I'm a bit confused of your purpose on the man.
Do you just simply want to know more about Odile or to test his uprightness? As you said, yeah it's been three months."
Maybe both. Faint smile appeared on his face but soon disappeared. Nambu was a little bit annoyed by the young policeman wasting himself.
The young man who graduated Utoland National Police University as a valedictorian reminded him Jun with her broken wings in the orphanage.
What was wrong with those youth? Nothing. It made him annoyed more.
Even though Nambu send him back to where he was exiled from, it was obvious that the young man would be lodged in someone's throat again soon who was in a navy uniform covered with thousands of tiny medal badges.
Nambu was not sure of curing his broken legs, but he couldn't let him to be thrown on the ground and being wasted either.
Like Chief Anderson once rescued a dusty stubborn mule from the demolished lab in a tiny island, this time it seemed that it was his turn.
No one would dare to harm a man who was under the wings of the chief commissioner of police, his friend Leon.
"Whether he respond or not, tomorrow I'm going to call Leon, Christine......"
"This time, I do not reprimand you." She smiled.
"However I'm feeling so disgusting. It is just a palliative care. There must be another men everywhere in this country, also anywhere in this world, even in ISO.
Maybe I'm just running away still not facing the real problem. Jun and Jinpei? Maybe too. So helpless."
He turned his chair to face the wide ocean under red sunset.
"At this moment now, no one would be brave enough to bring fake documents to the Ministry of Health and Welfare.
If someone want to stuck government supports into his pocket, he must accept higher risk than ever before.
At least you did not run away from what you'd witnessed as you always do. I can proudly say you've done enough.
I just hope the police would deserve him, the people in this country would deserve him, our world would deserve him. From now on, it's all up to them."
Christine regretted that she just escaped from the Biron School of Science with Jun.
If she could turn back time, she wanted to throw a tissue pack in her handbag to the principal's bald shiny head. Even though nothing would have changed by it.
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