Bradbury's Jar Week #87

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amethyst
amethyst Wanted: $1000 Reward posted 5 Sep 2013 08:47
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Copied and pasted from the posting at the temp base: So, in honor of the moving, hoping that this will be a more permanent reliable host: Found Please remember to copy your responses. The original conversation can be found in its entirety at: Cresent Temp Base
ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 5 Sep 2013 09:40
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Eh I might be having a bit of a blond moment here.... Are we supposed to re-post just our responses to the prompts (ficlets, poems, art, etc.), or are we trying to bring our responses over as well? Eh
amethyst
amethyst Wanted: $1000 Reward posted 5 Sep 2013 09:50
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We definitely need to reposts the responses to the prompt: stories, poems, etc., by their creator (unless another member is asked to this for personal reasons; mostly to avoid arguments, etc). As for the responses to the responses (reviews, conversation, etc), that I'll leave to each individual. Which is why I posted the links to the threads. It not only helps everyone find it easier, but if part of the conversation takes longer to move than another, we can at least find it easier. Does this make sense at all? Ideally, it should all be moved, but I'm realistic that people will move things as they can and not necessarily in the order of the original, thus the flow of conversation could be somewhat confusing and awkward. Much like my explanations.
ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 5 Sep 2013 10:58
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jublke
jublke Forum Legend posted 5 Sep 2013 13:56
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Mine was also posted after Springie's ... --- Nice setting, Springie! Can't wait to see where you take this. Although I might be too embarrassed to look too closely! EW: eew. Another GalactoRat. I should have guessed. Okay, here's my contribution: --- "Captain?" A young man in an ill-fitting Spectran uniform walked across the operations center to find his commander. The Captain in question was dressed in a black cape with a matching black and white striped face mask encrusted in purple jewels. The overall effect would have been comical if not for the older man's swagger and authoritative tone. "What is it this time, Magrew?" replied Captain Zeebrar. Magrew swallowed nervously. "I think I've picked up a Galaxy Security signal." When the captain didn't reply, he tried a tentative smile. "Sir." Zeebrar towered over Magrew and frowned down at him. "You think you've found it or you've found it? Which is it?" The other Spectran soldiers stopped to stare at the confrontation. Magrew's voice shook. "I - I found it. Sir. The transmission originates not far from here." "I see," said the captain. "And what sort of signal is it? Did you cross-reference the transmission against known Federation standards?" "Yes, sir." Magrew stood a little straighter. "It's a homing beacon." Zeebrar quirked an eyebrow. Either this kid was wildly lucky or incredibly stupid. "I see. And what, praise the Luminous One, is its source?" "Sir?" The man sighed. "Did you check the message header? Every Federation transmission opens with the sender's I.D." The young man brightened. "Oh, the point of origin! It's coming from the Condor's car." Wild laughter filled the room. Green-suited goons of all shapes and sizes pointed at Magrew and laughed. "He thinks he's found the Condor's space mobile at the bottom of a canyon." "What an idiot!" "Space boat is more like it!" "Besides, the Condor would never use a tracking device." Or would he? thought Captain Zeebrar. That Condor is a tricky one. "Silence! Whatever Magrew has found needs to be investigated thoroughly. We can't have Galaxy Security stumbling onto this base - our tunnels and mecha are only half built." He pointed at two men. "Pederman, Scrontz, verify Magrew's data. If the source is valid, track down the signal and eliminate it." All three men saluted. "Yes, Captain Zeebrar."
KT1972
KT1972 Gatchamaniac posted 5 Sep 2013 16:41
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ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 5 Sep 2013 16:48 (edited 5 Sep 2013 16:49)
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Scared Eeek! You've hit on several fears here: the fear of the (nearly) invisible enemy, the fear of insects, and the fear of robots gone wild! This is bound to make somebody in this group have a nightmare or two! Scared BTW -- I like the new avatar!
KT1972
KT1972 Gatchamaniac posted 5 Sep 2013 17:00
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Evillaugh bwahahaha Evillaugh
Originally posted by ElectricWhite BTW -- I like the new avatar!
BTW -- Thanks, I like yours too. Smile
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 5 Sep 2013 17:10
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EW - Jinpei's in trouble! A rat's a rat! Julie - oh, Jason's in trouble! I hope the team gets to him first. KT - beetles in Ken's body. EWWWWWWWW!!! and I thought my worms in Jason's head were bad.
Transmute Jun
Transmute Jun Queen of the Bird Missiles posted 5 Sep 2013 18:23
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Ewwwww..... now I'm thinking of this scene from Creepshow, which really freaked me out when I was a kid!!!! Warning, not for the squeamish... http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uBim1j1tVbE
jublke
jublke Forum Legend posted 5 Sep 2013 18:31 (edited 5 Sep 2013 18:37)
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KT: Fantastic and horrible! Believe it or not, I have an old half-finished fic on a similar theme. Funny how we all tred the same ground ... but I wanted to mention it in case I ever decide to finish it. I 've never intentionally copied someone else's work, but I sure get influenced by some. P.S. While it occurred to me to have semi-organic mecha bugs incubate in the Eagle, I just assumed that they would hatch, expand, burst from his body and attack Center Neptune. Never in my wildest did I imagine a scenario where they were teeny and wreaking havoc in his body - or that they couldn't be detected. Ewwww!
jublke
jublke Forum Legend posted 5 Sep 2013 18:32
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Becky: about those worms, isn't it high time you get Jason cured?
ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 5 Sep 2013 18:39
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Originally posted by jublke Becky: about those worms, isn't it high time you get Jason cured?
Ditto! Poke Poke Poke Poke
gatchamarie
gatchamarie Gatchamaniac posted 7 Sep 2013 05:12
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Originally posted by ElectricWhite Scared Eeek! You've hit on several fears here: the fear of the (nearly) invisible enemy, the fear of insects, and the fear of robots gone wild! This is bound to make somebody in this group have a nightmare or two! Scared
KT ... EW's comment reflects exactly my own reaction! Oh ... why is this all happening to my poor Eagle?!Crying3 Now, I cannot stay by his side cause I'm so afraid of beetles ... ewww ... cannot even stand their sight! Nonetheless ... you never disappoint us in keeping us hooked!
gatchamarie
gatchamarie Gatchamaniac posted 7 Sep 2013 05:29
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My comments transferred from Crescent Temp Base for this prompt and regarding the already transferred contributions, as per above: EW ... Hail Jun! If I were her I wouldn't have even considered taking down that thing, and much more so touching it! Julie ... I'm kinda happy for Magrew (I somehow always pity the poor, subordinate goons!) but am not happy at all for how things are looking for the Condor, who seems to be getting into more trouble! The following is my past comment regarding Springie's contribution at the Crescent Temp Base, just in case the piece would be transferred here long before I could be able to catch up with it: Oooh, Springie! I wish to know more! Such a thick atmosphere of romance around, related to my favourite birdies! And, such a lovely picture, too! Are they in Hawaii or on a desert island ... all alone?!
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 7 Sep 2013 07:30
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I've been in a creative rut thanks to RL, so I'll see what I can do. TJ - thanks for reminding me of that scene. Now I've got the heeby-geebies!
Springie
Springie Her Royal Fluffiness...Swan of Swans... posted 7 Sep 2013 16:39
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I just read this...oops! I'm a little late...but here is my contribution... "Looks like you've found a nice, quiet spot..." "Huh?" Jun turned quickly, her eyes wide with surprise. One thing was for sure, the "white shadow" had certainly lost none of his ninja skills over the months they had been on hiatus. She was pleased when she noted the owner of the voice in the darkness, yet a little nervous to see him at the same time. She quickly tried to gain her composure. "Yeah, well, I've had a lot on my mind lately, and..." "You don't have to explain. Mind if I join you?" Ken smiled. A million thoughts swirled through Jun's head. Does he need to talk to me, too? Have I done something wrong? Have things changed now? Should I act as if nothing has happened?
clouddancer
clouddancer Gatchamaniac posted 15 Sep 2013 13:47
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EW - more Galactor rats .... poor Jun, is she going to have to exterminate the J now? KT - now I am thinking of something similar to Nanites! Becky - I am going to echo others responses to wondering about the worms in Jason's head. I hope RL lets you get back to work on solving his problem. Springie - I love the location they have found. I find myself wishing it was me there instead.
Redbird
Redbird Gatchamaniac posted 1 Oct 2013 18:22
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Ok, this is continued from the "Dawn" Prompt which was #6. Here we get a little glimpse of Jun. Grammar mistakes etc. are my own. *sigh* Prompt #87: Found. It was getting cold, she realized, as she lay in the burgeoning dawn, lightly drawing circles across her lover's chest with the pads of her fingertips. He shifted slightly beneath her, and gently lay his hand over hers, stilling her actions, a slight smile curling the corner of his mouth. Quietly she studied his chiseled features, in the half shadows . Eyes roaming over the strong line of his jaw and nose. Sun-streaked brown hair, tousled, just brushing his shoulders. His well muscled form was different from the Eagle, but no less beautiful. Longer legs and torso, slightly broader shoulders, perhaps not as lean. His eyes, which were closed, were the color of a wild stormy sea or of the sky before an impending thunderstorm. Foreboding and hard. Yet she knew they could be filled with warmth and passion. Passion of which she had tasted . A passion which he stirred within her in return. As if sensing her scrutiny those stormy grey eyes opened, and gazed into hers. They were filled with something she never expected to see in anyone's eyes, let alone his. Everything was laid bare and exposed. Dare she think it? Put words to it? Would it ruin everything? Slowly his hand rose and cupped her cheek, while gently rubbing a calloused thumb across her reddened lips. As if in a dream, she reached out and mirrored his actions, his eyes closing once more at her touch. Her heart pounded in her chest, the feeling of it rising in her throat, almost choking her. She hadn't before grasped the strength of her feelings, of how much she loved this man. And she never realized how lost she had been --until she was found.
Transmute Jun
Transmute Jun Queen of the Bird Missiles posted 1 Oct 2013 18:26
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Ooh.... I'm going to poke you for more of this one!!!! Poke
Redbird
Redbird Gatchamaniac posted 1 Oct 2013 18:39
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I've been poked! LOL. Tongue I'll take that as a good sign then? Wink2
Springie
Springie Her Royal Fluffiness...Swan of Swans... posted 1 Oct 2013 22:34
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I think I need to pull out the pokey stick, too! I love your descriptions...that was lovely!!Poke
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 2 Oct 2013 04:29
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I think it's safe to say who the guy is, RB, but the woman?
Redbird
Redbird Gatchamaniac posted 2 Oct 2013 04:30 (edited 2 Oct 2013 05:06)
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Thank you Springie! That one was on the back burner for a bit, but I'm trying to work on more to flesh things out a bit. (Not just prompts but longer interactions). We'll see how it goes..... KT--those bugs in your prompt freaked me OUT. Ugh! And Becky--I'm not sure if I want to know about the worms in Jason's head or not! Eek6
Redbird
Redbird Gatchamaniac posted 2 Oct 2013 04:32
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Originally posted by Becky Rock I think it's safe to say who the guy is, RB, but the woman?
It's Jun (stated in the tiny description before the prompt response) Smile
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 2 Oct 2013 07:55
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Originally posted by Redbird
Originally posted by Becky Rock I think it's safe to say who the guy is, RB, but the woman?
It's Jun (stated in the tiny description before the prompt response) Smile
How'd I miss that? DUH
ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 2 Oct 2013 09:10
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Originally posted by Becky Rock
Originally posted by Redbird
Originally posted by Becky Rock I think it's safe to say who the guy is, RB, but the woman?
It's Jun (stated in the tiny description before the prompt response) Smile
How'd I miss that? DUH
Hmm...maybe your mind's still on what the bonobo's doing in "littledingo"!
gatchamarie
gatchamarie Gatchamaniac posted 2 Oct 2013 11:35
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RB ... I'm adding my own pokey stick, here! So ... am I understanding well that Jun have already had her own share of the Eagle, here, and now the Condor? ... oh, she's one lucky girl!!
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 2 Oct 2013 12:16
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Originally posted by ElectricWhite
Originally posted by Becky Rock
Originally posted by Redbird
Originally posted by Becky Rock I think it's safe to say who the guy is, RB, but the woman?
It's Jun (stated in the tiny description before the prompt response) Smile
How'd I miss that? DUH
Hmm...maybe your mind's still on what the bonobo's doing in "littledingo"!
Just what is he bonobo going to do next, EW? Inquiring minds want to know.
ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 2 Oct 2013 12:23
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Originally posted by Becky Rock
Originally posted by ElectricWhite
Originally posted by Becky Rock
Originally posted by Redbird
Originally posted by Becky Rock I think it's safe to say who the guy is, RB, but the woman?
It's Jun (stated in the tiny description before the prompt response) Smile
How'd I miss that? DUH
Hmm...maybe your mind's still on what the bonobo's doing in "littledingo"!
Just what is he bonobo going to do next, EW? Inquiring minds want to know.
Grin
Redbird
Redbird Gatchamaniac posted 2 Oct 2013 14:46
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Originally posted by Becky Rock How'd I miss that? DUH
Well, it's just a little one line description, so I could see where you might miss it. No worries....
Originally posted by gatchamarie RB ... I'm adding my own pokey stick, here! So ... am I understanding well that Jun have already had her own share of the Eagle, here, and now the Condor? ...
I wouldn't necessarily say that she also had the Eagle, GM. I'm sure she's seen Ken in swim trunks (etc) so she would have an idea of what his body looks like out of civvies/birdstyle. I'm working on more of this...so hopefully at some point there will be more back story or hell, just some kinda story! LOL.
ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 17 Oct 2013 18:55
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EW: Jun should truly fear when Jinpei hits puberty ... jublke: Uh oh, Jason's in trouble for sure. KT: Eeeeek infested by biomech beetles? Get 'im off!!! Springie: Poor Jun tying herself into emotional knots once again. Smile Redbird: Well, well, looks like someone's gotten frisky ... Curious to see what direction you take it!
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