An anonymous contribution this week: Foil

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LOL poor Joe, more unintended consequences of becoming a cyborg?

Hmmm...could be...

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i think Joe doesn't like Tasha much, but she's VERY interested in him...... He really does have his work cut out this time

I looks like Joe has a lot of work to do on this mission. Hopefully he can manage and Tasha does not get her way with him.

LOL, EW! I had been thinking about something similar, but you did it so much better than I could! Let's see... ************ "And so, Team, you must immediately leave in the Phoenix to fight the Spectran menace!" Zark instructed. "G-Force!" The Team stood still as the circular platform they were standing on dropped down suddenly, sending their hair flying upward. They transmuted enroute, then ran down a long, semi-circular hallway to the launch bay. Jumping aboard the Phoenix, the clear dome emerged to surround them before the elevation platform brought them down to the Bridge. Even as they took their seats they could see water passing over the Phoenix's viewscreen to cover the ship completely. Once the launch bay was completely submerged the doors opened and the Phoenix moved out, slowly at first, then picking up speed until they had burst forth from the water and were rocketing into space. "Just look at them go, 1-Rover-1!" Zark exclaomed in wonder. "G-Force is so amazing! They're moving through space in the blink of an eye, thanks to the technology of Time Warp that I invented! With me behind them, they're sure to foil Zoltar's evil plan this time!" 1-Rover-1 yipped. "Well yes, 1-Rover-1, of course they always foil Zoltar's plans. If they didn't, we'd be ruled by Spectra, now wouldn't we?" 1-Rover-1 yapped. "What do you mean, it feels like we do the same thing every week? Why every week it's different! So thrilling! So exciting!" 1-Rover-1 bleeped. "Oh, fine, if you really feel that way, then I suppose you don't have to have your wrench snack during this mission." 1-Rover-1 moaned pitifully until Zark gave him the wrench. "Same thing every week! I need to reprogram that dog..."

Oops, double post! Sorry, the slow loading of this site strikes again...

Stilll catching up on all my reviews.... EW--What a sweet story...although I wonder what kind of show, or soap, Jun was watching. Glad to see the gatch team helps each other out no matter what the situation. Chris....aw c'mon, more than three of us are reading the story...look you've now got three reviews...and for me, critiques have nothing to do with like or dislikes...i look for certain things...dramtaic tension, characterization, motivation...as to whether it is a thumbs up or down...(no whiners, either) And my biggest beef--or beefcake, as the case may be is there isn't much happening....something seriously needs to blow up....or fall down...or come apart...or better yet...invade! This installment reads very well, nothing technical wrong with it, I kinda foundered through the POV in the second bit, but in re-reading it, I think it was just me... Joe should have had some nasty snarky comeback for Tasha though...something to put her in her place and toss up her allegiance to either him..(as in wanting her in his bed) or to Michael, (thus endangering him some more...then maybe Mark/Ken would have woken up a bit more..) As alwyas YMMV..... hee.

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RIGirl, I just read the previous entry in this and I'm loving Katse's side of it! It's amazing how he always seems to come back, no matter how much Sosai X is frustrated by his failures! Love the image of Katse pounding his fists like a frustrated toddler!

KT and clouddancer: I thought it would be nice to not have Joe just blindly fall for the bad girl for once. And, well, it's the job of the second, isn't it? To step up when the leader drifts off of his moorings. Though Joe would rather give Ken a pop to the head and get him back on track! TJ: It's funny, while Zark is a R2D2 rip-off physically, it's easy to picture 1-Rover-1 being the one of the pair with the snarky attitude. k2: This is not a fast-paced story, I know. It's quieter (which might not make it awesome for this kind of serial posting, but it is what it is). It's also not sitting around for me to tinker with, or going to beta, so it's also not quite as polished or zingy as it could be. That's one reason it's not going right onto gatchfanfic, I'll want to probably make a lot of changes once I know how it all works out. RIgirl: Thanks. Ken's overwhelmed, and I think Joe is still just seriously happy to have an assignment somewhere pleasant and fun! I love your addition, too, as Katse yet again tries to squirm out of taking any blame, and Sosai again places all of the blame on Katse's head. He created Katse and the organization, I find it amusing that Sosai never wants to believe anything is his fault, either.

Originally posted by ChrisWIt's funny, while Zark is a R2D2 rip-off physically, it's easy to picture 1-Rover-1 being the one of the pair with the snarky attitude.

And given that no one really knows what Rover is saying, you can really give him any personality you want.

CW -- First of all, I think your count's a bit off (by, say, a few dozen or more). Second ... are you familiar with the trick where you balance a treat on a dog's nose and make him stay perfectly still until you signal that it's okay to gobble up the goody? Well, think of the readership as a bunch of puppies with the Club Aphrodite storyline balanced on their noses, and a few have begun to whimper because they know the goody's gonna be great but the wait's killing them! (No pressure, Chris! No pressure.) TJ -- Yup, I can see Rover being that way! Though Zark should be glad nobody calls the SPCRA (Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Robotic Animals) on him! RIgirl -- If THAT isn't a perfect summary of Sosai and Katse's relationship...

EW: Hehe, aw, thanks. I admit I was having a little pity party there. My dogs are now threatening to call the Society for Prevention of Cruelty to Readers (SPCR) ...

TJ--made me laugh...and even when I saw the series, I thought the dog robot was always way cooler than Zark...what is with it with the stupid sidekicks in American cartoons of that era. RI-girl--so are we going to be seeing more of Kaste? Nice job with him, and I wonder what Sosai-X has in store for the SNT next.

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I suppose Iona's due for a sample of Ken's particular discipline technique, heh heh. Wonder if Ken's totally bucking orders, or Nambu's totally bucking orders, or ...

It seems like Iona's gotten away with it for now, but I suspect she'll be hearing about it later once the mission's over.