Bradbury's Prompt Jar #25

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k2p2
k2p2 Babbling Loonie posted 17 Jun 2012 04:21
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In honor of Father's Day, this week word is going to be.... Father Good luck with it, and remember to keep writing!
KT1972
KT1972 Gatchamaniac posted 17 Jun 2012 09:34
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Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 17 Jun 2012 11:37
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Good for Ken. There's nothing like holding a new baby....
ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 17 Jun 2012 17:02
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ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 17 Jun 2012 17:09
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ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 17 Jun 2012 17:21
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EW: Glad to hear that it affected you. Smile And poor Jinpei, LOL.
amethyst
amethyst Wanted: $1000 Reward posted 17 Jun 2012 17:42
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Thanks K2!
jublke
jublke Forum Legend posted 17 Jun 2012 22:04
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KT: Love the name! Smile Chris: Now there's an intriguing pairing ... EW: I enjoyed that one! Smile
ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 17 Jun 2012 22:31
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Originally posted by jublke Chris: Now there's an intriguing pairing ...
I still blame Amethyst! The fun of chat rooms, ideas get tossed around ... some stick to the wall. Smile
KT1972
KT1972 Gatchamaniac posted 17 Jun 2012 23:56
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Chris - I was wondering how you were going to work this one, but you've come up with something totally unique.... well done. EW - A fun piece on an old joke, but that's kids for you, they hear it for the first time and think it's funny.
ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 18 Jun 2012 00:02
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Originally posted by KT1972 Chris - I was wondering how you were going to work this one, but you've come up with something totally unique.... well done.
I have to admit when I first saw the prompt and it hit me that I should go with the spirit of it, my first response was, "Damnit ..." Smile But I like how this turned out.
clouddancer
clouddancer Gatchamaniac posted 18 Jun 2012 05:23
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Chris: That is something I would never have thought of, but certainly explains why Joe comes into Nambu's life. EW: Great twist on the old joke.
k2p2
k2p2 Babbling Loonie posted 18 Jun 2012 05:40
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KT-loved the name, and the sweetness of the story...then again I got to hold two babies this weekend. Hee... Chris W---nice setting of a very dark scene...the reader just KNOWS something horrible is going to happen..and happen soon. Well done. EW--very funny..kids being kids...although why is it so important that he be nice to her?
RIgirl
RIgirl Gatchamaniac posted 18 Jun 2012 08:36 (edited 18 Jun 2012 08:45)
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KT1972
KT1972 Gatchamaniac posted 18 Jun 2012 09:44
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Thank you RIgirl for your comments, and a wonderful father/son scene with perhaps the only team member who has successfully maintained a positive relationship with his own parent. Maybe one day he will feel confident enough to share the secret of his identity with him.
amethyst
amethyst Wanted: $1000 Reward posted 18 Jun 2012 10:38
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Originally posted by RIgirl I know I'm late to the party here, but I would like to add a contribution as well. I've had this scene rattling around in my mind for quite some time, but could never find a home for it, and since it fits in so well here, I would like to share it, if I may
Welcome! Thank you for sharing. That was a wonderful glimpse into Ryu's mind and his relationship with his father. Please share more as inspiration strikes and we are always looking for more prompts if you have any ideas.
k2p2
k2p2 Babbling Loonie posted 18 Jun 2012 11:58
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Originally posted by amethyst Thanks K2!
No problem, no problem at all..
ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 18 Jun 2012 12:21
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RIgirl -- why so shy? Confused1 It's okay if you're late to the party; it's better than not showing up at all! I thought this piece was an excellent addition to this thread. It's not often somebody appreciates it when they have something special, and you showed Ryu's appreciation for his relationship with his dad well.
ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 18 Jun 2012 15:03
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cloud, k2, and RIgirl: Thankee. Smile RIgirl: No one's ever late to contribute to a prompt. Smile There's no time limits! It was nice to see Ryu and his dad in a peaceful moment together. We're left to think that his father doesn't think much of him at various times, so I imagine it has to be seriously tempting for Ryu to tell his father what he really does to gain the man's approval. I like that it's the closeness, here, that he misses the most.
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 18 Jun 2012 16:26
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Chris - That was a twist I wasn't expecting. EW- Laugh2 That's a god one. RIGirl - Thank you for the look into Ryu's relationship with his father. He'll make hs father proud.
Daniella T
Daniella T GatchaFreak posted 19 Jun 2012 12:56
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Originally posted by Becky Rock Chris - That was a twist I wasn't expecting. EW- Laugh2 That's a god one.
Beckyyyyy! Was that a deliberate pun or just a typo? If the first, hat off to you! EW, you never cease to amaze me (I admit, I hadn't heard the joke before, and found it quite funny!)
Daniella T
Daniella T GatchaFreak posted 19 Jun 2012 13:00
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KT and Chris: I found both your stories quite emotional, albeit for very different reasons of course. But both showed how strong a father's love can be -- and it's nice to see a different pairing than Kentaro/Nambu!
Daniella T
Daniella T GatchaFreak posted 19 Jun 2012 13:04
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Hi RIGirl, welcome to the party! Wave3 Don't worry, there's no dress code and no deadlines! I must say Ryu is more of a mystery to me than the others -- in the sense that I haven't read many fics about him and haven't really thought about him like I've thought about the other members of the team -- so it was great to read your addition! Hope you come by again soon Smile
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 19 Jun 2012 17:53
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Originally posted by Daniella T [quote]Originally posted by Becky Rock Chris - That was a twist I wasn't expecting. EW- Laugh2 That's a god one.
Beckyyyyy! Was that a deliberate pun or just a typo? If the first, hat off to you! It's a typo. With my RA, my typing skills suffer and I don't always double-check before I post. Sorry to disappoint.
ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 19 Jun 2012 19:55
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Originally posted by Daniella T
Originally posted by Becky Rock Chris - That was a twist I wasn't expecting. EW- Laugh2 That's a god one.
Beckyyyyy! Was that a deliberate pun or just a typo? If the first, hat off to you!
DT -- I hate to admit it, but I had to re-read Becky's post a few times before I had any idea what you were talking about! Nerd Becky -- So it was a happy accident! It's still a good pun (even though I wasn't sharp enough to catch it!) Dork
Daniella T
Daniella T GatchaFreak posted 21 Jun 2012 01:11
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Originally posted by Becky Rock
Originally posted by Daniella T [quote]Originally posted by Becky Rock Chris - That was a twist I wasn't expecting. EW- Laugh2 That's a god one.
Beckyyyyy! Was that a deliberate pun or just a typo? If the first, hat off to you! It's a typo. With my RA, my typing skills suffer and I don't always double-check before I post. Sorry to disappoint.
But still, it brought us a smile!!!
Daniella T
Daniella T GatchaFreak posted 21 Jun 2012 12:32
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//"Mr. Cordell is here to see you, sir," said Anderson's secretary, popping her head in his office. He nodded, sighed deeply, as he contemplated the new trouble Mark had brought upon him this morning. Once again. A tall man in dirty overalls entered the office, pushing Mark by the shoulder. The boy, no more than eight years old, looked down at his shoes. Anderson motioned to both of them to sit down. Mark continued to stare at his shoes. "So what I can do for you, Mr. Cordell? My secretary told me there was some trouble at the airfield..." "Trouble?" Cordell leaned forward in his chair. "Sir, I am the manager of the airfield, not a baby-sitter! I've told you before -- your foster son is caught once again tinkering in the warehouse, I will report him to the ISO -- and I don't mean to you only, as you don't seem to be very effective in controlling him! Well, he did it once again. I'm banning him from the airfield until he can learn to obey orders!" Anderson looked at Mark. "Well, what do you have to say for yourself?" Mark just shook his head. "I'd take that as nothing, then. Wait for me outside, Mark. We'll discuss your punishment later." Mark nodded miserably, and left the room wondering whether this time his punishment would be to do kitchen duty in Centre Neptune, or help clean the gym. None of the two were very appealing prospects. As the door closed, the manager leaned again towards Anderson. "If I were his father, I'd make sure Mark stays grounded for at least a month. Maybe this will teach him some sense!" Anderson brought his face close to the man's, so close that he could almost smell his breath. "If you were his father," he whispered, "you would have sacrificed your life to save this planet." He pulled back. "Don't worry. I'll deal with Mark."//
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 21 Jun 2012 15:02
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A pissed off Anderson. I get the feeling there will be more to this, DT. I wonder how this guy would deal with Joe?
KT1972
KT1972 Gatchamaniac posted 21 Jun 2012 15:09
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I wonder how Joe would deal with him, more like
clouddancer
clouddancer Gatchamaniac posted 21 Jun 2012 16:22
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Ahh, I am more interested in what Mark was tinkering with. Is he improving something, building something, or is his tinkering damaging something.
ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 21 Jun 2012 16:23
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Ooooh DT. Someone's gonna be watching his back as he leaves. Wonder just what Mark was tinkering with and why. Smile
RIgirl
RIgirl Gatchamaniac posted 21 Jun 2012 17:50
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Originally posted by clouddancer Ahh, I am more interested in what Mark was tinkering with. Is he improving something, building something, or is his tinkering damaging something.
I was wondering the same thing! I kept wanting to know what Mark was caught doing in the first place ... *snerk* "But, honest! I only changed the engine timing just a little bit ... and maybe adjusted the belts ... oh, tried to make the wings a little more aerodynamic ...."
clouddancer
clouddancer Gatchamaniac posted 21 Jun 2012 18:57
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Originally posted by RIgirl
Originally posted by clouddancer Ahh, I am more interested in what Mark was tinkering with. Is he improving something, building something, or is his tinkering damaging something.
I was wondering the same thing! I kept wanting to know what Mark was caught doing in the first place ... *snerk* "But, honest! I only changed the engine timing just a little bit ... and maybe adjusted the belts ... oh, tried to make the wings a little more aerodynamic ...."
Exactly, and I could see Jason doing the same thing with the cars in the motor pool, before Anderson sends him off to start racing at the track. And perhaps Tiny doing a similar thing with the motor boats/yachts/jet skies at the marina.
ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 21 Jun 2012 19:17
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Originally posted by clouddancer Exactly, and I could see Jason doing the same thing with the cars in the motor pool, before Anderson sends him off to start racing at the track. And perhaps Tiny doing a similar thing with the motor boats/yachts/jet skies at the marina.
As word goes out across Galaxy Security to watch out for the Anderson kids, lest the entire organization grind to a halt because no one can get anywhere with all of their vehicles in pieces. They're gonna wonder what he's feeding them. Smile
Daniella T
Daniella T GatchaFreak posted 22 Jun 2012 01:35
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You guys are great!!! I admit, I hadn't thought of all these possibilities, it was just a little fic based on the word "father", and of course Cronus/Mark came up as an idea. But now you've got me wondering! Wink
clouddancer
clouddancer Gatchamaniac posted 22 Jun 2012 04:30 (edited 22 Jun 2012 05:16)
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When ever I can, I enjoy providing ideas to get people writing especially if the outcome means new stories. Angel4
Daniella T
Daniella T GatchaFreak posted 22 Jun 2012 05:17
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Originally posted by clouddancer When ever I can, I enjoy providing ideas to get people especially if the outcome means new stories. Angel4
Your wish is my command! Grin Will try to do something!
ElectricWhite
ElectricWhite Gatchamaniac posted 22 Jun 2012 10:18
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Originally posted by ChrisW
Originally posted by clouddancer Exactly, and I could see Jason doing the same thing with the cars in the motor pool, before Anderson sends him off to start racing at the track. And perhaps Tiny doing a similar thing with the motor boats/yachts/jet skies at the marina.
As word goes out across Galaxy Security to watch out for the Anderson kids, lest the entire organization grind to a halt because no one can get anywhere with all of their vehicles in pieces. They're gonna wonder what he's feeding them. Smile
Pity the Anderson kids couldn't do something about Zark... 7zark7
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 22 Jun 2012 13:29
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We could only hope.
ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 22 Jun 2012 13:37
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Originally posted by Daniella T Your wish is my command! Grin Will try to do something!
You've even got a good title now ... "The Anderson Kids" *grin*
k2p2
k2p2 Babbling Loonie posted 8 Jul 2012 16:29
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Sorry so late to the game on this...been tied up with all kinds of things. flying But now I am FREE!! At least for a time... RI-Girl what a sweet story between Ryu and his Dad. Love the imagry, and am now left wondering as to what his Dad knows, guesses, wonders about his rather exceptional son...but is just as content as Ryu is to let things just 'be,' in the moment...something I think men can be better at then us multi-tasking women....(yeah it sounds sexist..but there it is... Daniella-now you've got me wondering too as to what Mark was doing, and how he got all the way to hangars unobserved....love to see more of this.
k2p2
k2p2 Babbling Loonie posted 9 Jul 2012 02:33
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ChrisW
ChrisW Gatchamaniac posted 9 Jul 2012 02:39
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Aw that's really lovely, k2. Smile
KT1972
KT1972 Gatchamaniac posted 9 Jul 2012 03:04
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a different Father I see.. nice little story though.
amethyst
amethyst Wanted: $1000 Reward posted 13 Jul 2012 11:59
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Very descriptive K2. I always love the interaction between Joe and Iona and how he has essentially taken her under his wing.
RIgirl
RIgirl Gatchamaniac posted 13 Jul 2012 14:18
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I really like how you set the scene, k2 ... I felt like I was right there with them!
Becky Rock
Becky Rock Gatchamaniac posted 13 Jul 2012 16:47
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I liked that a lot, K2. Every little bit you show us of Iona adds another piece to her puzzle. Not to mention how you incorporate Joe into her private life.
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