Hello all, I need to ask for a bit of help. The Puppy rewrite is the first real story that I've written in over ten years. The last one was The Neverending Rush Story. That was a collaborative piece. I'm not counting all the " adult stuff" I've done. So I need honest reviews of the Puppy story. Writing has a learning curve. This site has wonderful writers. So please teach me. Thanks, as always.

Ah, just looked at the Archives and I see that you've updated it... Is is close to being complete? I know everyone likes feedback on their stories, but I confess that I'm not always comfortable reviewing a fic if I haven't read the whole thing straight through. Been awfully busy lately too... Sigh. Definitely behind on my fic reading. (Aaand, what/where is this "adult stuff" you've done? I think that smut qualifies as "real stories"! )

I too was wondering if the story was complete.

Only a few people,my husband being one, know that I do the following. Ok, big secret is now out. I've done requested fantasy/ fetish/ sex pieces for 6 years now. Most of them are by request from couples. Those, obviously, can't be shared. A cleaned up version of a STNG piece is on fanfiction.net. It's called "Play Time". The point of me writing the Puppy piece was to spread my wings a bit. Iborgia and CD the Puppy piece isn't done yet. I'm working on the end which will be the counterpoint to the battle scene. Meaning it will be very emotional, heartfelt, ect. Iborgia, I didn't mean that " adult" writing isn't real. I was raised New England Roman Catholic. Even thought I don't practice anymore, the Puritan thing is still deep in my psyche. I do the request pieces because of the joy it brings to the couples. I definitely can't argue with that. Hopefully that explains a bit. Here is the link. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6233515/1/Play_Time

I meant to say earlier, thanks for the link to your FF story, Dragonsbain. I will check it out later. Perhaps this evening when/if the rain starts and I am kept indoors.

Clouddancer, Now that you know my deep, dark secret. Enjoy the Play Time story. I don't know if I can do a Ken/Jun story. Not brave enough yet.

Originally posted by Dragonsbain I was raised New England Roman Catholic. Even thought I don't practice anymore, the Puritan thing is still deep in my psyche.

I was raised more "New England Protestant farmer," in which the only two "sins" seem to be being lazy/undisciplined or being a sissy. End result, I feel vaguely guilty about all fic-writing, as I should be doing something more "useful" with my time, but no particular guilt about smut.

Originally posted by Dragonsbain Meaning it will be very emotional, heartfelt, ect.

Looking forward to that! Thanks for the ff.net link -will check it out...

Dragonsbain, you did very well with that Play Time story. I had never considered a Data/Tasha story when you mentioned a STNG story. I really enjoyed it though. I am sure with enough encouragement we will eventually get you to write a Ken/Jun (or Mark/Princess) scene.

Thank you Clouddancer. I have to get Data and Tasha back on the ship. I got caught up with the Puppy rewrite. I'm hoping to do an entire story arc from Play Time to a few months after Tasha's death. Then I have a book after that. I've whittled it down to about 700 pages. I'm still working on it. The problem with the Ken/ Jun sex scene is that it wouldn't be pretty. There is a lot of shields between those two that need to be broken. It would be more of a Ken facing himself than a lovey thing between Ken/ Jun. I already know what I would do between Joe and Jun. Sex would ruin that relationship. I should do the Joe/ Jun piece after I finish this. I think you all would like it.

Originally posted by Dragonsbain The problem with the Ken/ Jun sex scene is that it wouldn't be pretty. There is a lot of shields between those two that need to be broken. It would be more of a Ken facing himself than a lovey thing between Ken/ Jun.

I've always seen Ken as someone who represses a lot -especially with regard to Jun- but you know that sooner or later he will snap and the result... Yes, not necessarily "pretty" (that would come later, I think) but plenty of "hot!" potential

Originally posted by Dragonsbain I already know what I would do between Joe and Jun. Sex would ruin that relationship. I should do the Joe/Jun piece after I finish this. I think you all would like it.

Now this does sound interesting! "Ruin," hmm? Would Ken, or Jun's feelings about him, have anything to do with that, or do you see Jun and Joe being a no-go as a couple regardless of that due to personality or temperament incompatibilities? Me, I can imagine or accept a functioning relationship happening (or not working out) about equally well between both Jun and Ken, and Jun and Joe. In my mind, with Ken, he'd always have the love vs. duty and leadership conflict going on, and with Joe, I think he'd always be something of an innate solo unit, not naturally inclined to share fears or problems and likely to take off on his own to do dangerous stuff without telling anyone. In "triangle" situations, though, I inevitably root for Joe, though there is more canon to support Jun with Ken. Seems you've got a lot of good ideas that need getting down on paper!

Sounds like we're going to see some wonderful fanfic from Dragoinsbain! I am looking forward to seeing what you come up with!!!!

Thank-you all.