Holy hell, I did it! *falls over dead* Sacrifices My request: Condor and Swan get 'closer' in the G1. The Eagle sees them, but what is his reaction? Does he confront them?

Oh Eva.... I'm dying here! You took a Condor/Swan request and turned it into an Eagle/Swan request... Of course it would be *you* who did something that gutsy!!!! But still.... I love the Eagle/Swan action here, and that Jun finally gets her happy ending....

Mmm, that was a hot Condor/Swan kiss, though. "*falls over dead*?" No! Dead people can't write fanfiction! Get up!

Oh fuck me .... Eva, that is the first thing of yours I have read :blush: And, girl - I am so going to go out and read some more. That was absolutely stunning! I usually don't like those first-person type things, but wow. wow. wow. double wow. I have to go read that again. Wow .... Thank you so much for sharing this! Thank you! And although you just made me feel so inadequate an author because of your sheer gorgeousness, I still love it, love you .... SJ

This was great Eva. Sometimes I wish I could write like you. You describe scenes, objects and feelings so well with a minimum amount of words.

That was fantastic Eva you caught the feeling of fighter very well, and you did it Eagle/Swan. I know your not a shipper at all for that pairing. Well done!

Oh Eva...I loved this! You're winning big points with the 'shippers on this one!!

Thank you, everybody. It didn't feel like I did a very good job, so believe me, you've revived me and given me hope.

Originally posted by clouddancer You describe scenes, objects and feelings so well with a minimum amount of words.

I have a tendency to be melodramatic ad nauseum and just go on and on and on and on...so I have to work to hone it down...so your compliment means a lot to me. There's a trick to it, or at least a metaphor you can try. Think of a story like a sculpture. It's there, under all those words...you just have to cut away any extraneous material. And a great sculpture is going to have extremely clean, smooth lines...it's so good you think it's alive. That's the goal. So you just keep cutting and cutting and smoothing until you can't possibly remove any more without hurting the sculpture/story. It's hard for me to write things as quickly as a challenge requires, because I can't cut and smooth as much as I feel I should. I need some distance to be able to see the problems. I waited until like the 4th to start writing, stupid me, so I think that's the fastest I've ever written anything. Well, except IF stuff, but that's just freewriting, which is a different kind of exercise. (Though I do go over my posts multiple times before I ok them...and then half the time I go back several times anyhow. I'm embarrassed that people can see how often I rework my posts, because I do it a lot. Now you know why. ) I have some really good books that helped me learn to "write tight"er. There's one called Make Your Words Work, another called Self-Editing for Fiction Writers, and a third called Write Tight! I have all of them, but each of them is excellent. I genuinely believe while writing is a great skill to have, the skill to edit/rewrite is even more important!

Originally posted by Evangelina I have some really good books that helped me learn to "write tight"er. There's one called Make Your Words Work, another called Self-Editing for Fiction Writers, and a third called Write Tight! I have all of them, but each of them is excellent. I genuinely believe while writing is a great skill to have, the skill to edit/rewrite is even more important!

I may have to go out and look for those books Eva. Thank you for the recommendations and letting me 'in' on how you write.

I thik I'm going to go out and find all three of these books!

Thats some very good writing advice Eva, I guess you can never know to much! I rework posts mainly because I forgot to put something in theta I meant to ...or I find errors, and I feel the need to correct them...

Eva, I like the way you make Eagle so harsh/stubborn, and at the same time loving, letting his feelings win. Mmmm ...in the conference room...that adds up to the excitement great fic!

OK Finally got some time to read some fics! I agree with CD. Eva, you use so few words, but man, they are so charged with emotion and descriptive that you don't need any more! Short, sweet and straight to the point! Like an Emeril "BAM!". OK....read 2 out of the six challenge fics...not wait... that's 3...Now ready for some more! *goes off to find the other posted entries*

Ohh, Eve, your way of portraying Joe is just wonderfull. The same wth the thick head Eagle. Jun's emotions are very well done. And you left the tie loose for a sequel. Kudos for the story! And btw, thanks for not killing my favy bad guy!