Greetings, all. I've managed to write my second-ever fic. I'd be grateful if someone who is not me could read it and tell me if it makes any sense, if it fllows reasonably well, where the wording is clunky -that sort of thing. It's about 9800 words, is sort of a Gatchaman II prequel, and has one smutty scene that I'm really nervous about. Andrea

Sounds like fun... If noone else will take you up on this, feel free to pm me....

Uhm, not a native English, so I can't take the job!

If tone falls through you can send it my way. Been way too long since I beta read but I can at least give it a run through if you dont get a better offer.

I'm always open for a beta read as well, but it sounds like you have some good offers already!

I think I could really benefit from a male perspective on this fic, as it's entirely written from a male character's perspective -even the smut scene (a BIG leap into unknown territory for me!). So, Toneman, you're on. I will PM you. Thank you so much for offering, Firebird and Transmute Jun. I will inflict my next fic on you! Actually, I think I'm going to take a break from writing for a little while. I have discovered that writing a fic seriously eats into time normally spent reading other people's fics. I really need to catch up on my reading.

LOL, IKWYM! Sometimes I get a bit behind on reading as well. But you know, it's MUCH faster to read than write, so you should catch up within a couple of days...

Originally posted by lborgia88 I think I could really benefit from a male perspective on this fic, as it's entirely written from a male character's perspective -even the smut scene (a BIG leap into unknown territory for me!). So, Toneman, you're on. I will PM you. Thank you so much for offering, Firebird and Transmute Jun. I will inflict my next fic on you! Actually, I think I'm going to take a break from writing for a little while. I have discovered that writing a fic seriously eats into time normally spent reading other people's fics. I really need to catch up on my reading.

ITA Iborgia... That happens to me too, but I just can't help myself... Most of my fic seem to be from the Eagles POV...I have done smut from his POV...Though I'm not an experienced Beta reader.

lol my problem as I tend to write from a female perspective so not much help with the guys point of view.

Originally posted by lborgia88 I have discovered that writing a fic seriously eats into time normally spent reading other people's fics. I really need to catch up on my reading.

Funny, I was just said the same thing to a certain Swan the other day!! Since I finished Traditions, I've been doing fairly well catching up though. I read Eva's fic (No Swearing), and am now almost totally caught up in Ebony's Lightening (I'm only 1 chapter behind) and have downloaded eps 8 and 9 of DITH from Tone. And that's only been in the last 2 days! Woo-hoo! Go me!!

I've tried to write from a guy's POV, but I've never had any male feedback on whether or not I've been successful.

You nailed it girl. I think everything flows well. I like the vibe of the story. Youse guys will not be dissappointed with this one. It's a must read. Now.... Hurry up and post it.

Yay! another fic up soon to read

Thanks, Toneman! I should have it up on gatchfanfic sometime on Monday. Right now, I'm 2 hours from home in a loft apartment over a nightclub. Didn't get to sleep till 4 AM and I don't feel so great. I'm too old for this. The moral is, avoid nightclubs that are owned by friends -they will keep giving you free drinks. Only consolation: boyfriend feels worse than me. But, this means I will have to do the driving home. Toneman, if you ever want me to beta your work, I will gladly do so. Andrea

Originally posted by lborgia88 The moral is, avoid nightclubs that are owned by friends -they will keep giving you free drinks.

Funny, the Eagle sees that as an advantage.

I can't wait Iboriga... ITA on free drinks, it sounds great until you realize that you just had that one too many...lucky you had a place crash and let the head spins get outta the system... At my last job they held the work functions in Nightclubs in the city, and then me and a few girls would catch the train home...mmm...interesting trips home...

Yes, the Eagle would appreciate my situation! But would he drink four black russians? With his self-discipline and devotion to duty, he probably sticks to juices and coffee. One good thing. My friend seriously wants to hire me to be a part-time bookkeeper for his club. He bought it 8 months ago and now tells me he has 8 months worth of A/R and A/P that needs to be all set up in Quickbooks. This would be something I could do until I land a full-time gig, and I would probably only have to go there once a week and bring the paperwork back home with me. Ebonyswanne, at least you could take trains home and not have to worry about driving. If I lived in a city with a subway or train system, I would gladly ditch my car.

Where do you live Iborgia??? Sydney has a pretty good rail system, even if the trains never run on time! I hate driving into the city for starters, and I only drove once from a work function with a car full of drunks...I told the young girl who was opening the store the next day to not ring up sick... She knew the rule, (Ebony's) self inflicted you take headache tables and get it together by 8.30am...no excuses. they wouldn't dare ring me up and say I got pissed last night so I'm not coming to work...the wouldn't miss a lecture that easily...I loved the girls I worked with though and we all keep in touch. It sounds like a good deal for a part time job...

I lived for a long time near Cleveland, Ohio, but I moved to Indianapolis back in the summer. My boyfriend moved here a couple years ago to take a job, so I came here to live with him. My friend with the club is in Dayton, Ohio. Cleveland has limited rapid train service, and Chicago has a great train system, but Indianapolis has nothing! And, people drive like maniacs here. Back in Cleveland, I had three coworkers who were good friends and we used to go have drinks together at least once a month. I miss them.

Not knowing much about the cities that you lived in it is harder to picture...I lived my early years in a country town with no public transport...so I understand that frustration...you get your drivers license as soon as they will give you one! I hope you meet some new buddies soon!

Originally posted by Ebonyswanne Not knowing much about the cities that you lived in it is harder to picture...I lived my early years in a country town with no public transport...so I understand that frustration...you get your drivers license as soon as they will give you one! I hope you meet some new buddies soon!

So unlike me in my country town. I did not get my drivers license until I was ready to head to University. I had no where to go until that point. And no friends to do anything with if I had anywhere to go.

I didn't get my license until I was 19. I was nervous about driving, and my family only had stick-shift vehicles -I had a terrible time learning how to manage without stalling all the time. I'm still the only one in my family who, basically, can't drive stick.

Originally posted by lborgia88 I didn't get my license until I was 19. I was nervous about driving, and my family only had stick-shift vehicles -I had a terrible time learning how to manage without stalling all the time. I'm still the only one in my family who, basically, can't drive stick.

That is what I learned on as well. Tht is what my parents insisted I be tested on too. They told me if I could drive a stick then I can drive anyone's vehical and not have an excuss not to be able to get home safely.

I got my license at age 16 and never used it for 4 years! But I then had 4 years of no accidents to lower my insurance rates when I did start driving. But I never learned to drive a stick... Well, not a CAR stick, anyhow...

The license that I got when I was 19 was from Nova Scotia. Then, much later, at age 28, I was living in Ohio and decided I'd better get a drivers license again. My Nova Scotia one had long since expired, but that didn't matter too much as I had no car anyway. To get the Ohio license, I had to go through the whole process again -get learners permit, practice with my sister in her car, take the road test etc. It was just like being 19 again, except my sister's car was an automatic (Yay!). Four months later, I got my first car, a green Plymouth Neon. I stll have it, almost 10 years later, and it still runs, but I really am tired of the green color. I submitted my new fic at Gatchfanfic.com, so it should be up sometime later today.

Originally posted by lborgia88 To get the Ohio license, I had to go through the whole process again -get learners permit, practice with my sister in her car, take the road test etc. It was just like being 19 again, except my sister's car was an automatic (Yay!).

Weird... when I moved out to California, they didn't recognize my 'foreign' license from Ontario. But all I had to do was take the tests. I did the written test and then made an appointment for the road test. I came back on the road test day and passed and got my license. But I didn't have to go through the whole learner's permit or lessons or anything again. In fact, the whole month or so I was waiting for the road test, I just drove around with my Ontario license as a 'visitor'. If I had failed the road test, I still would have been able to drive my car back home and come back another day for it. Weird....